by lunaswift
(a) This would have probably been a better fit for "non-consent"
(b) Brian's final act would most likely have led to his shop being closed down
On the 'pro' side, the addition of the woman outside, and the turmoil inside her own head, was a really smart move and cranked up the erotic buzz in the latter scenes.
Very, very hot. And well-written too. I thoroughly enjoyed this, many thanks.
It's part of the Girls Get Wet collection, have a look at lunaswift.com for similar stories.