All Comments on 'Cost of Loyalty'

A story with angels. Creative, sweet and simply wonderful. Theres nothing better than Penn Lady on Literotica.

I'm ashamed to admit that this is the first of your stories that I've read. But I can't wait to start on more. This story was unbelievably well thought out, stunningly written and captivating from start to finish. I could picture every bit of the story as I read it. Wonderful, truly a wonderful job!

Here they are, going on about free will, and aspiring to act in the image of Christ, and when you actually do it, you confuse them to no end.

I love your take on Heaven! :-)

This is the fifth of your stories that I've read. While I've enjoyed them all, I think this might be my favorite, at least to date. The idea is very creative, and the various twists kept my interest. Testing of the values we hold dear is an ongoing experience in life, and perhaps afterward as well. Questioning and testing the assumptions of our own beliefs must be continually done. If we don't, then we become herd animals, blindly following others with no real idea of why. Loyalty, justice, friendship, and love are central to our survival as a species and a society.

Keep up the good work.

love portrayed in its truest form, from anonomus...

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i am a huge fan of your writting and this story is one of my favorites of yours loved the pace of the story it never felt rushed like most short stories do and it gave plenty of back gorund info to make the charactors come to life thank you for posting this great story

I don't know if you see these comments on an old story, but since I discovered you as an author, I have been reading your stories and just finished this one. You have an imagination that is far beyond mine and are a very skilled writer. All I can say is that this was an interesting story as it looks at the basic concepts of Christianity and the results of our sometimes wayward lives here on Earth.

Damian's dread lifted a little as he and his angel, Selina, flew down the empty highway. Thinking of her made him smile. She was no angel, of course, nor was he, but she could have been, and he felt a little guilty when he thought about it. "She should have been!" He thought. She gave it up coming with him, and her decision made little sense.

You need an editor to point out the glut of adverbs and nominalizations and prepositional phrases.

If only we were able to read the fine print when it comes to the promises religion offers. Of course Satan tried the loopholes but was bested by pure humanity. To be cynical, what's more human than a rock to the noggin?

That aside, you've crafted a beautiful tale which had me hooked all the way, even without gratuitous sex. Well done.

This is the first story of yours that I have read PennLady and to be honest I only came across it by accident. I shall be reading more of you though. A very well thought out story. You are wonderful and thank you.

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I look forward to reading more of yours. Such depth!