All Comments on 'Count Down To Moonlight Ch. 05'

This chapter made me a little confused. I think you might have got some names mixed up or maybe the flow was just off, but i still like the story thanks for sharing. MEchmanas.

Though you have to work on the grammar. I will agree that it was a bit confusing towards the end but altogether, not bad. i'll look forward to reading more.

What was confusing, because I have read it countless times, going over it and I can't see the confusing part, so you have to help me. Which part do find confusing and why? as for the grammar, well, that I appoligise for.

I think the confusion is with the statement below, why would Zach change Keeley when it is Duncan who is her mate!

He hugged her back, raising his eyes to look into Zach. "I don't know what's going to happen to Keelay son but if you change her, then there may be a war." He warned.

I dont speak spanish but it neededto be said in a more dramatic way!!!! Fabolous!!!

this is another good chapter

glad you updated!! I'm enjoying your story - they're cute together and Duncan hasn't been too over the top. Please keep writing!!

Plain old good writing!

Loved the inner dialouge.

Big thank you for making chapters longer.