All Comments on 'Cousins Reunited'

by bobnknock

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CUSpacecowboyCUSpacecowboyalmost 10 years ago

Sooo it was her he was with and now somehow she doesn't remember? You also should've been clearer that it was a man telling the story, until they actually had sex I was almost thinking it was a woman.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Good story, high potential, editor needed.

Good story. You need grammar, syntax and spelling help. You could be a top author, get an editor.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Their?

Try they're

Critic99Critic99almost 10 years ago
Haven't read it - won't rate it

"Their is a possessive pronoun: I like their new car.

They're is a contraction of 'they are': they're parking the car.

There is an adverb meaning 'at that place': park the car over there."

Source: Apple's Dictionary App

My crusade continues.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Good start

Nice background, good start. Now explore her need for forced, rougher sex.

bigmikey357bigmikey357almost 8 years ago
ok

Not a bad concept. A good edit would have made the story much clearer but I did like the effort. Keep writing.

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