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by writing_is_hard

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IMcRoutIMcRoutabout 14 years ago
A good beginning

but it still needs a lot of work. The matter of changing point of view is okay,

IF YOU RESTRICT it to Will's 1st person pov and Georgie's 3rd person omniscient pov. But you introduce another one - Will's 3rd person - and it becomes not only confusing but irritating.

Yet again, a good beginning with a lot of potential

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