All Comments on 'Daddy's Little Cupcake Ch. 03'

Way too abusive. There is just to much anger in this story. I'm sorry but it just wasn't sexy at all.

You speaking in third person was sort of okay for the first two paragraphs of chapter 1 but, after that it was really annoying. Could turn into a nice story. Whole thing could do with a rewrite in first person logic and leave out the anger and abuse aspect. That's not sexy, it's meanness.

Sorry, I disagree with both of those comments. I liked the third person style and I didn't think it was abusive. Clearly both of them get off on verbal abuse and also a certain amount of pysical "abuse" too!

1st Person: I did this.

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2nd Person: You did this.

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3rd Person: He/she/they did this.