All Comments on 'Deathly White Thighs'

Wow that was amazing!!!!!

not the usual kind of romance, but interesting. keep writing! =)

Totally unreadable and unenjoyable. Couldn't get through the first page.

Not your normal writting style,, different somewhat confusing yet I read the whole thing because you wrote it.?.?.

I gave it a 75 because it rated MAYBE more than a 50 BUT it was a very strange and unusual start. If you were not the author I would have stopped after the first few paragraphs. As it was I very nearly did anyway. It went on from there to be a frothy light tale. I would seriously consider redoing the first portion of the story down through his masturbation scene.

By the different stories you are capable of writing,some may not like this but I do.

Thanks guys for your thoughtful comments. Spot on some of you. I decided to veer away from my usual style to try something new, more dramatic, but I must admit after the start I did swing back to more-of-the-same. Still will try to sharpen up a bit.

of his dumb stories, but I liked it. It maintained a nice rythym and the story held together well.