by patty_parker60
Good scene-setting opener. I hope we get more about Della's first lesbian encounter and we hear more about Andy with Mom. Lesbian incest is my favorite plot line. Only shortcoming was the mix-up on title character's name midway through. Looking forward to next story.
Thanks for the feedback...the main character's name was originally DARLA; an error in editing that I will be careful of from here on.
U get RIGHT TO IT, dont't you? Normally, I like a bit of BUILD UP;
I will gladly make an exception in this case!
Work on your word selection and next time give more details of the sex sceane and all other sceans, you just jumped around to much.
perhaps an example from some of your OWN work?
Ah, there IS NONE?
Don't change a THING! U explained the
MINOR prob with the title character's name;
most of us can over-look that minor detail
and focus on the HOT mother-daughter SEX!
I've been following u since u began
writing as lesbian_slutmom; I'm
over the moon to see that you are
again writing tawdy tales of lesbian
anal sex...chin up; don't let the nay-
sayers put you off your game.
Waiting impatiently for Chapter 2!
As a 58 year old, who loves to give anal strap on sex, I would really like to 'explore' your delightful derriere. Good story.
And the passages describing how it FEELS when a thick dildo is submitting your rectum, how each and every ridge sends the millions of nerves within your inner ass to FULL AWAKE STATUS...the way firm thighs bounce against your ass: pain and pleasure: this Woman knows what she's talking about, no doubt