All Comments on 'Dennis The Nerd Ch. 01 - Discovered'

So, we've got a protagonist who never cared about Dennis until he had abs, proceeds to make him over without really asking him what he wanted, pours booze into him and once he, unsurprisingly given his inevitable low tolerance, passes out she fucks the very next hot guy she can find.

Okay, Dennis may be a "good guy", but considering the way you've presented your main character, all I want him to do is run the hell away. It's hard to want to read more when a protagonist is this unlikeable.