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foren7813foren7813about 10 years ago

Has great potential!

chocolatesistachocolatesistaabout 10 years ago
very interesting

hope you continue

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Too short.

Too short, and ending was too abrupt.

ammomanammomanabout 10 years ago
I Agree with the other comments...

Well written. Nice story developement. Tempting and teasing on both parts. Keep the tension happening, and the temptation definitely needs to continue Thank you.

ShysquirterShysquirterabout 10 years ago
I agree

Good start, but much too short.

peebudypeebudyabout 10 years ago
blue balls

all build up and no pay off. the story ended just as it was getting started. please post chapter two soon.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
No, No, No.

Much to slow and much to abrupt. Plus not believable even as a fantasy. These things don't happen to 18 year olds. They happen to 13 - 14 year olds.

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