by coaster2
a strong start. Look forward to the conclusion but sorry that I will not have any more of this story's chapters to look for when I open Literotica. Entertaining, interesting and well written. Thank you.
great story , loved these chapters and can't wait for whats next. Thanks for sharing this marvelous work.
Went to the computer with some anxiety this morning, as there was no chapter yesterday, but my worries were for naught. Your stories do a nice job of tying things together and this one was no exception. The meeting with "the Mother" should be interesting in the last chapter, as she seems to be a strong character.
I can usually find something in a story that gives rise to a negative comment or two. So far I can't find anything to carp about, good story, well written.
is your description of the social dynamics from one to another part of Canada. It is educational and also gives it verisimilitude.
Create bit of suspense with Dex's heart valve condition, then the interactions regarding the old contacts of Trent and generation of new business, and finally, warming up to the stuffed shirt Michael, Michelle's older brother. I've really warmed up to this story in the same fashion (no pun intended, although a lot of focus seemed to be on the dress of both Dexter and Michael). Please keep the chapters coming. 5 stars. P.S. I hope the new wife won't cheat on Dex -- she doesn't seem the type, but it will be the day Hell freezes over when I really understand women . . .
Personally I like the insight into business. Though I admit that I was worried by everythiñg moving along smoothly. Things just do not work that way. Then, came the heart valve problem. On to meet the father and the mother of the blushing bride!
I find this "serial" very well written, with believable plot and characters. I'm always waiting for the next chapter to be posted. Thank you, Coaster2.
LeFrog
Ending it before Michael & Michelle come toe to toe. LOL
This is a great story, it's like reading a novel. Thanks again
I'm enjoying the Canadian cultural differences referenced between city's. These same or similar cultural differences exist in American city's of which we are all subtly aware of, to one degree or another. It is fun to read about the Canadian city's as they haven't been as well covered on this site as the British and American.
Writing very good but has dragged on way too long.
This is not the Saturday Evening Post. I have already taken Organizational Theory and Development 102.....and now your point? Please bring the story to an end.
You've been writing a good story and the high ratings you've received show that. I hope you'll take these comments constructively:
1. The setting up of the new house early in the story had Sandra on the mortgage but not on the title without knowing it. I don't think that was necessary in the constext of the overall story and would be extremely difficult to achieve.
The technical aspects of that aren't necessary, but in an overly simplified nutshell, to have someone in British Columbia on a mortgage but not on title would mean that the person is not a mortagor but a guarantor, which would be very clearly pointed out to her by the lawyer she saw to sign papers (almost certainly a lawyer other than Dexter's lawyer as the practice in B.C. is that any competent lawyer would send her for independent legal advice)-or the guarantee would be signed elsehwere, likely at the bank, with her not having any papers to sign at the lawyer's office, which would require its own explanation.
Further, having both names on title would have worked about as well in the context of the overall story.
2. I trust the conclusion will bring something worthwhile, such as a makeover of Michelle's relationship with her family. Otherwise it would seem to me that the story could have been concluded earlier.
I've enjoyed this story.
You've moved beyond the cheating wife/reconciliation story I've become accustomed to in Literotica. This has become the story of a man who really came into his own later in life and whose dynamic personality endeared him to all he came into contact with. Michelle is beautiful, intelligent, warm and in love with Dex. Story book charm for both. It's nice to believe that such good can come from such ruin. Bravo.
it probably didn't help Michelle very much.
I haven't been commenting much on these stories, even on my original reading, and was somewhat surprised given the high scores I gave it when I first read it.
Then I realized, my comments tend to be when I find something in a story that I either disagree with, or that rubs me the wrong way for one reason or another, and that just isn't the case here.
I'm simply sitting back and enjoying the ride through a well-told story.
so the hard work is showing its happy face. TK U MLJ LV NV
It speaks well of him that when a change in perspective was called for, he was able to make it.
He tells the doctor he's going through a divorce while the doctor acknowledges that his "wife" has been concerned about him? Otherwise pretty clean story line.
...to find out what the quarterly returns look like. This story reads like my office career, minus any drama.
Staying interesting right to the end. Wonder why his cheating bitch of a wife screwed up so badly. Dex seems preternaturally nice.
I read "Above it All" and gave you straight 5 stars. Just finished "Dexter's Renaissance" and did the same. I like your stories. They are uplifting and contain character development, a good plot and your spelling and punctuation are much better than most on this site. I live in Calgary so I feel right at home in your tales.
Now, I have to run to the store but I'll be back for more. Thank-you for your effort. Really enjoyed the pace.
Absorbing
Holding my interest and very well plotted and written.
Meredith vs Merilee, the comment below is correct, but I think she started out as Meredith, then some chapters back became Merilee for a spell. Always best to do a document wide find and replace with changing names.
Onward to the finale!
I am enjoying my first foray into your writing. The story is holding my attention very well.
Don't see what's so impressive about Michael when the bastard should have been more approachable to his sister!!
Janice is an office gossip, she is TOXIC
I like this story but I'm still a little upset he didn't take the twins more seriously, I think they were down for him. Even if he just settled with Kat, I think that relationship woulda been more engaging.