by cybersexbomber
The writing is broken, and poor.
I could have gone for the funny factor, if the writing quality was even remotely good. That was frankly unreadable.
Please edit your work- or have someone else do it!
You didn't quite pull off the whole erotic thing but this story was laugh-out-loud funny. I almost fell off my chair when the J-Lo thing happened. Keep up the funny work man :D
I made a terrible Mistake on the fifth paragraph of the story. I was referring to ROGUE and not BANSHEE (I don't know why I tend to confuse the two names in my head, I tend to think of Banshee as a female name and Rogue as a male name). My apologies to all X-men fans around.I can't edit the submitted story but I wish I could!
Have a good one and thanks for the feedback.