All Comments on 'Donkey Ch. 02'

Omg the lucky fucker, I have dreamed of sucking and fucklng Jennna Colman for years, ever since I first met her when she was sixteen. She oozed sex appeal even then. Cunt lapping sex maniac Lanc’s.

Great scenario, hope to read many more instalments. It was good that you didn't take advantage while she was the worse for drink, a true gentleman! Loved that you shot a massive load of cum in her month. Ms Coleman exudes sexuality as a 'prim and proper' woman next door, my favourite type I think. Just a minor point, she has dropped Louise from her stage name, now Jenna Coleman.

great chapter so fucking hot maybe u could do susanna reid or rachel riley next

Instead of periods, use commas for dialog.

“Holy fuck, that dick is massive,” Jenna said, looking excited.

You can put a period if it’s not followed with who said it. Also, I would work on not repeating words in the same paragraph. It feels like reading the same thing over and over and can get repetitive quick.

I love Jenna and the story concept was good. Just need to work on the writing chops.

Love Jenna and great story

Great story, are you going to continue his Adventures ?