All Comments on 'Double Punishment Ch. 01'

Really hot! Can't wait for more!! You know one of them wants to take her in the ass...

Hi Explorer.....

Good concepts here... nice pace and well-thought out....but you need an editor or at least a proof-reader to correct the myriad of grammar and spelling mistakes..... let's see Chapter 02!!

Cheers

thanks for your comments the secong chapter is coming soon and its with her boyfriend this time

Predictable story,far from arousing.Your spelling is horid.

Good story, but you need to get an editor. Your spelling needs tuning a bit but overall good story.

Get an editor....get a proofreader....throw THIS in the trash!!!!