All Comments on 'Dream Come True'

if you haven't been told yet

that was a really good first effort

now please carry on and finish the story

Oh my god u need to finish this story quickly because that story made me really wet and I need to hear the ending because if I don't I'll go crazy and you did a great job for your first time keep it going girl

Amazing detail!!! I love it but you should make the story a bit longer.

I really liked it, and it was hot ...so mission accomplished.

On the downside it was very short and you quit before you got to the good stuff. Also a few spelling and grammar issues that were a little distracting... Bedroom, bathroom, breathtaking...

finishfinishfinishfinishfinishfinishfinishfinishfinishfinishfinishfinishfinishfinishfinish

5 leave us in SUSPENCE please please finish it '!!!!!!!!!!!!,

Alright finally getting around to writing a sequel.

I really liked your story and I agree with the other comments, you should write another chapter. You should also have someone edit it as there were quite a few errors that another individual might have picked up and corrected for you. Keep writing, it was a great beginning.