All Comments on 'Dream lover'

Glad to read from you again! I loved this story, as I did your other ones.

I like that you don't stray too far away from the 'central point of interest', and yet try and keep the story line not too unrealistic. IMHO, though, the 'coming out phases', where the woman reveals or realizes she loves receiving oral, and the man unveils his complementary fetish, are sometimes too straightforward. I prefer your stories where you make things more gradual. I think there's more thrill in seeing the woman steadily and relentlessly taking charge, humiliating the man, and gloating over his surrender...

I certainly look forward to a follow-up, and would also love that he 'fall completely under her spell'...

BTW, thanks for having kept the creampie out of it!

A thanks for the effort, but it was hurried and more of a "wham bam ..." type. The dialogue was far from smooth. "Going through the gears" is clearly from a non English speaker's perspective.

The characters and the setting have potential. It would require a lot more work, in developing the characters and giving them an opportunity to get closer.