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Click hereSomething in Sean cracked in that moment. Something he would never be able to get back. Broken. His head was spinning and he felt his reality slip away. All he felt was pure rage.
Suddenly he overpowered Arshad before he realized what was happening. He swiftly grabbed the sword from his very hand and pierced his stomach. Arshad surprised eyes widened and groaned as he fell to the ground on his knees. Sean wielded the sword with such force that when he struck; he instantly severed his head.
"You're a natural."Haseem said in appreciation. He knew Sean would react this way and let him. It was only a matter of time. Arshad talked too much anyway.
"Now, there is much to be done."
Sean looked at the man as if he'd lost his mind."I will never follow you."
Haseem let out a crooked grin. "You say that now. But all you need is a little reconditioning. It's all been planned out. After we're done with you, you won't even recognize yourself."
That same rage from before coursed through his veins. He clenched his teeth and charged Haseem like a bull. But suddenly Sean felt a prick in his neck and stumbled heavily to the ground. He landed a few inches away from Khatira's angelic face.
Everything around him grew hazy and heavy.
His last thought before slipping away was Khatira's lush midnight hair and how it smelled of chai.
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Here are some meanings of people's names:
Khatira- "desire"
Haseem- "decisive one"
Arshad- "path to righteousness, rightly guided" (Ironic huh?)
Emir- "general or commander"
**So we're pretty much at a little more than a half way point in the story. This chapter was really hard to write. What do you think, will Sean be able to overcome everything he's been through??
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 10 years agoBut this had me sobbing. Great series!
partial2passionalmost 11 years agoAuthorThank you so much for your comment, it really made my day. And also thank you to everyone else for their kind words and support. :)
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoYou deserve a ten. Wow. If I thought Good Grief was anything to go by. This story kept me on the edge wanting more. Please update soon. The way u write I'd swear u got both stories published already. Never ever stop writing. U are amazing. Ur stories are everything I live for. Comedy,suspense,romance and intrigue. Wow. I'm at a loss for words. Can't wait 4 chapter ten.
partial2passionalmost 11 years agoAuthorHellooo my peoples,
Just wanted to let you know that chapter 10 is nearly complete. It was almost ready to send to my editor last week buuuuut I kept messing with it and polishing it up a little more. So hopefully it'll be ready to go within the next couple days. I'll let you know when I upload it. Ttyl
-p2p-
Quietmahoganystormalmost 11 years agoI thought I commented earlier, but maybe not. Anywho - fab update. I've been curious about Sean from the beginning. Explaining who he is, and what happened to him is just great. His backstory wasn't fleshed out until now & I appreciate that you took the time out to do that. The emotions invoked are pretty raw, and the setup for the takeover was just great. I enjoy these updates. I hope the best for Sean - and that he can get the professional help he needs.
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoI have been following you since Good Grief. So when you started Duplicity I thought that there were only good things to come for Sienna and Jason. My heart cries for Sienna. The back story of Sean is so saddening. I was really thrown for a loop. I was not expecting this. Anyway I love your stories. Please keep writing. I am looking forward to what happens next.
honeybreealmost 11 years agoI really did have to re-read this again especially the ending...wow. Honestly, I’ am the type of reader that usually knows how a story is going to pan out base on the sequence of events and sometimes that can be a good and bad thing. But that is the one thing I like about Duplicity that it isn’t a basic x,y and z story like Good Grief (don’t get me wrong I LOVED LOVED Good Grief) but a little change up is nice especially since this story is multilayered. Personally, I can’t wait till you loop it together in real time, especially with some of the loose ends tied up about Sean’s past, and focus on Sean and Layla because now there is no need to explain things to the readers and hopefully in the next chapters we get to see them uninterrupted and see if their fire grows. Stick to your vision, sometimes it can get a little muddy before you see the bottom so keep up the good work and see you in ch. 10!
IronDragonalmost 11 years agoSeriously, please keep going! I'm loving the series so far, and you're doing an outstanding job! :)
CoCoNiy101almost 11 years agoDon't ever let anons discourage you from writing! I know they can really kill your vibe (Kendrick Lamar Voice hahaha) but just know that for every 1 person that doesn't like it, there are 5 more that do.
Sometimes, well actually often lol, I put out a bad chapter and I'll get some nasty ass comments but I just say to myself "I got something for ya'll!" Then I put my soul into the next chapter and really work for the feedback I want.
Moral of this little rant, just turn it all into motivation girl. You're a great writer.
partial2passionalmost 11 years agoAuthorSo I'm kinda surprised with the reaction of chapters 8 and 9. But that's totally ok if that's of how you feel. I did wholeheartedly ask for your comments and I'm glad I'm getting them. So thank you for taking time out and giving me your opinion.
For the Anons that just said they don't like it at all or I ruined it... I chuckled when I read that because I'm thinking Ooookay?? That really doesn't help me at all.
I'm one of those writers who actually considers my readers reactions. But if you tell me you don't like it and that's it, well I'm going to probably disregard it as some grumpy person who doesn't like anything... or maybe get discouraged from writing it all together. :/
Now for the ones that mentioned that they feel that the story is dragging or straying away from the main characters... that I can work with. Because I can totally take a step back and say, Oh crap! maybe they're right. You see because although I work from an outline, there's a lot of improv that goes on in my stories. And while I'm writing chapter 10, I can definitely make sure to keep your comments in the back of my head.
Not for nothing but I'm still REALLY new at writing. This is literally my 2nd story, Good Grief being the first. Like literally. Lol I mean I've written some poetry here and there, a million years ago but I'm mainly a visual artist that recently started writing. And Duplicity just kinda became a something else entirely.
Don't get me wrong, I like where its going and I'm having fun taking it there but I don't know, to me readers input and reactions is important. Because as a writer I'm looking it at it from one angle but you guys are reading it with fresh eyes. So thanks again for your well thought out comments and I'll catch you on flip... in chapter 10.
-On a side note, it's looking like Duplicity will be about 13-14 chapters. But we'll see. :) Later...
-p2p-
Hawtytawtyalmost 11 years agoThis was my fav story of yours but in pursuit of whatever you are in pursuit of you have kind of lost my attention. The whole Sean mentaly ill shinanigans are just a bit too much and the story is goin around in circles as it is we on chapter 9 with just little interaction between the main characters. The story is no longer even focusing on the female protagonist honestly you are neglecting my girl Layla and to think i was falling for her. Still well written but straying from the story line prolonging it kinda does that. Please do not be offended i just kinda had to say that. More please.
SweetMonzalmost 11 years agoI feel like its been 9 chapters and the story hasnt gone anywhere with Layla and Sean. Its like they barely know eachother. But great chatpter though. Ready for the rest.
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoI was enjoying this story, WAS! you've ruined it with the last few chapters and you're only at the half way point?
