by LaRascasse
I couldn't stop crying as I read this which is saying something for me. I can't stand crying. It awakens too much pent up pain. Beautiful story! I love the echoed words. Love and pain. The two are inseparable in my mind. Thank you for this lovely story!
I appreciate the fact that you have not followed a formula, such as 'stuck in a cabin in a blizzard' or 'sister helps brother after his accident,' etc. Fantasies can culminate however we chose but real life often ends with unpleasant outcomes, especially if one is involved in incest. Sad stories about incest remind us that there is a difference between fantasies and reality and we should always be mindful of that difference.
sit down and make us miserable why don't you!? Well written story but highly depressing!
I seriously think this story has some very real experiences tied to it, if this is so, then please accept my sincere condolences.
NOW----- write a happy sexy story, let your creative juices flow. you will feel better.
Absolutely Amazing.. and as soon as I stop crying so that I can see to type, I might praise this again... Brilliant story.
Everything all the previous remarkers, even the Anons, had said.
Your wonderful story aroused all sorts of emotions but one decision was just so easy.
5*, should have been 10.
Simply heartbreaking. Every paragraph here is heartbreaking.
... I have ever voted. Unusual for Literotica, this story is so beautiful - and heartbreakingly poignant.
Thank you.
Outside of an abiding fondness for the song " I Want You Back ", people like me don't get MJ & people like me don't get this story. It's just too over the top. I can't deny that this author knows his demographic & has appealed to that not insignificant subset in no uncertain terms.
My ommniscent, inner cynic whispers in my ear that if the narrator had loved Vicky Jones "right", she wouldn't have played tag with rapidly moving vehicles . Regardless of that venal sentiment, this author has confessed himself to be empathetic with main characters who are vulnerable & weak in key areas.
That admission takes a definite strength that I reluctantly admire to a limited but definite point.
I'm not normally one for this category on Lit but I do always love a tormented soul. I really enjoyed the raw emotion and the dramatic shift in the end. The sad story element is under valued in erotica and really needed in my opinion.
on daring to publish this here where so much seems the same. Now I have to figure out why vicky is such a popular tag.
I read a lot of stories on this site . This is one of the few 5's I have given but (as I wipe away the tears ) it is the most deserving . Thank you for your gift . BRAVO ! BRAVO !
I loved this. It has a breathless, train wreck quality to it that never lets up until the very end... and then it ends as train wrecks and breathlessness often does. Loved the refrain too - I love you, Vicky Jones. It provided a kind of cadence to the piece that acted as an anchor in this story that otherwise was hurtling towards a tragic end. I just couldn't stop reading.
So sad. I love the nostalgic quality of your work. I feel like I need to take you out for a drink after that.
that brought tears to my eyes , and being a love between a brother and a sister made it more special . when you truly love someone heart and soul to no end , you will never forget it EVER . there will be nobody that will ever fill that part of your life like that . and society still thinks its wrong , I DONT
Very well told.... like sharing the perspective of a lost soul. A first rate piece.
Short but incredibly powerful. More than just the throwaway stroke story you typically see on here. You really convinced me of the love these two had for each other. Very well done.
Great story. So much happened in such few words. Takes a lot of talent to do that.