All Comments on 'Excuse Me Miss...'

I have read a few of your stories. My favorite was Cassie (since it's my name I am biased) but I might have just switched over to this. To be sure I need more. CG

mmm now i really need to kknow what happened at the wedding I just know he went with her.

Oh definitely more, you have brought out two really good characters, keep irt up

More please. The character development was good. It would be fun to have a few more dates or something before the wedding. One at his place, maybe introduce her to his friends. Lots of potential here.

I would love to see you take this further. There are so many ways in which to develop the story

We at least need a story about the wedding.

Very nice start to the story I definitely want to read more and of course we have to hear about the wedding.

I like it. Good story flow, good speed, good characters. Keep it up.

This is a great story! I have to know what happens at the wedding.

Great start. Let us in on more of the romance of Jeremy & Alicia

Please sir, is there more?

Great start,don't let it end here.There's plenty of tread left on this!

I'm waiting for Chapter 2. Get with it. Your writing is excellent, as is your character development. Like I said, Please get with it. we want MORE!!!!!!!!!

Great story

Come on man this was just a teaser, you know you have more of this tale. Now tell it, rest of the chapters please

We can see many more chapters here. Keep up the good work.

Go to the weding and have them fuck in the coat room.

Your story was well written and flowed very nicely. I think you have several more chapters here if you will give them to us. Keep writing.

perfect starting block for many more chapters!!!! the characters go well together let's see what fun they can get up to!!! juci x

I want to know what will happen to the wedding with jeremy as her date. Hahaha. :)

Good start and interesting characters. Develop them and the situation in future episodes.

Please morre story......

Of Course they should move forward.

More please it was great

With that introduction, she at least has to ask him to attend the wedding with her, if for no other reason than to piss off her former boyfriend. Well written!

Great story with good characterization and an actual plot. It could have been a little longer with some additional story development but has excellent potential.

ADD MORE PLEASE!

finish it off.

good read.

well written and enjoyable

But it appears from your responses I may have found one. Thanks for all your input, I'll get working on more chapters soon.

As a first chapter this is great. Please continue.

This has a good start and I will look for more. Please have this continue to another wedding, theirs.

Should there be more? Hell yes!!!

Great start, I lied it a lot.

Now what would be really cool for future chapters are some cameo appearances by characters from your complex family/relationship series. Like jeremy working-class for brandons company.(in my mind he already does BTW.)

I meant liked, damn autocorrect. Thats right, I read this on my phone.

More, More, More, More and some More

I liked this story. Not as complex as your other stories, but then again why does it have to be. However, it has been six months since you first published it and there is no second chapter. I'm a little disappointed that the story is not finished. I do, however, think that if left alone the readers can use their imagination to finish the story, but it still wouldn't be the same.

Please finish.

I THINK MORE.... BECAUSE I'M ALL FOR THE NICE GUY FINALLY SUCEEDING

GETTING THE GIRL BY BEING NICE GOOD SHOW. LOL EVEN NICE GUYS DESERVE SOME OCCASSIONALLY IN THIS CASE I'D LIKE TO HEAR HOW THE WEDDING THING GOES AND AFTERWARDS

Where they go to the wedding and make the cousin and her ex feel bad, let the ex hit on her at the wedding reception and piss off the cousin etc. In other words, revenge!

Don't leave us hanging

And have her ex-boyfriend and her female relative (cousin?, I forgot) make themselves look silly in some way. Have them get married and quickly pregnant to make the grandparents happy and then to live happily ever after. Thank you for writing this tale.

Well written throughout, highly plausible and it just happens that the main characters are 2 "normal" size realistic young people with believable careers. As a "normal" size guy @ 6'7 & 260lbs and a retired Navy Chief I liked it a lot. More chapters!

BRAVO!!

The story is fine but if you still want feedback, I find Alicia terribly unlikable. Bad day aside, she's vindictive, insecure, selfish, bitchy, rude and vain. Couldn't get into the sexy part of the story at all because I couldn't get past her. Tone down those less desirable aspects of her and it'd be nicely done. FWIW, YMMV.

Good start to a lovely story. You cannot stop there, please?

Great story, the first of yours that I've but and I loved it. I will be started part two shortly.

So far, so great!

Yes, more please! Need to know hat happens at the wedding she is going to ask him to be her “plus one.”