by hvnlyinnocent
oki so there were alot of mistakes that kinda threw me off but the storyline was awesome. a bit rushed but great. =]
Good story,still a bit rushed,and many typing errors,,..." If anyone walked by they would be surprised that I was able to sit so calmly on the grown(ground) with this over sized wolf in from (front)of me. I had to try my hardest to not laugh out loud, but a little giggle slipped through my lips before I could stop it. The wolf just cocks his head to the side, eyes still locked on me. I am sure he it(is) trying to figure out why I am not cared(scared). To be honest, and(any) normal girl would be,,,,this is just one paragraph,it makes it a bit hard to understand sometimes.Do you have a proof reader or someone that might help you with editing?I think you will do well if you take some time and reread before you post.
this story would have been so much better with proper grammar and editing.