All Comments on 'Factors of Change Ch. 01'

you will continue this story

This is soooooooooooooooo good and you have only just started I know this is going to be a really super read

Love this little gem of a story. :)

I hope you don't make the common mistake of presenting a fabulous first chapter and then fail to follow up in a timely manner. The readers are a fickle lot, if to much time passes between chapters, they lose interest and become...well you know.

I agree with the previous review, this is a true "GEM"!!

Please serve us more!

Great start! Please keep going.

I enjoyed how you are putting the story together and the pace. Good descriptions.

I got through the better part of the first page -- up until her name was mentioned -- assuming she was male. (Maybe it's because most werewolf stories I've read start that way? *shrug* I dunno...)

Wondering why I'd made that assumption, I re-scanned what I'd just read; you make no mention of ANY personal features or characteristics that could establish gender until that point. Which my mind apparently took to mean 'the usual'. (Aside from the 'she' descriptor of her inner wolf, but then you also said 'sister' wolves, which I took to mean ALL inner wolves were female -- the moon is usually a goddess in werewolf stories, so... Unusual, sure, but I've read weirder. WAY weirder.)

Anyways, I'm curious:

Was that reveal done intentionally, or did it just happen to come out that way as you were writing it?

Your bio page states 'with luck and work, writer'. I'd say with this first chapter, you're well on your way. Excellent start. 5 from me.

This is a great first chapter! I can't wait for more

You must add a werebunnie in the story somewhere! :D

Promise me that you'll finish. Don't break my heart. ;-;

A very fresh and entertaining take on a much used trope. Well written, nicely rounded characters. One of the best werewolf stories on this board. And I agree with others, PLEASE PLEASE don't abandon this story half finished!

damn where is the bid dickhead alpha that sees her and say you are mine so get over here and obey me because i said so?instead you give us an alpha that actually has some kind of brain that finds his mate and is willing to let her figure it out.

When I find myself looking for more 'offerings' - then it's obvious to me that you are very good. Keep on going, please.

Please please finish this!!!!!

Please put out the next chapter quick.

can't wait for the next installment. Pretty, pretty please make it quick.

5 Stars

Nicci

Great. start, am really looking foward to reading more. Hopefuly you'll delight us with the next chapter soon.

I can't wait to read what happens next & I love what has happened so far. I love your charcters too! I hope that you can have a regular updating schedule for the story I love it so! Also feel to make it as long as possible, I so love nice long stories! :)

Off to the next chapter, yay me!!

I don't know if you have submitted stories on other sites but you did an excellent job on this chapter. It was quite nice to not have in your face howling good time wolf sex... The build up was excellent, the way you have taken werewolves and defined them the way you want was excellent. It is nice to come across a story that doesn't have cookie cutter prefab characters that are stereotypical. As some of the others said I would love to see longer chapters and that is a definite indicator that I am more than interested.

Tossing myself a bone but take a look at my Silver Moon story. You might enjoy it. (Had to ya know)

Well done. Great characters and the start of a good story; can't wait to see more. 5 stars from me.

I've been reading on this website for a few years, but obviously missed this story. I saw the new chapter and checked for the first chapter. Finding that the story line began in 2014 made me pause. An almost two year gap in updates is a little scary. I don't like to get invested in a story only to have it stop. This was a great beginning and I hope the following chapters are just as good.

Unfinished story. Excellent writing.

Sexiest elevator ride ever. Too bad it's an unfinished story. Will read what there is, though, the start was great.

I like stories with a good build up, and this one fits that description.

The scene's been set nicely, with the basics of the werewolf theme explained. I'm looking forward to the next chapters.

Don't bother. This story is not finished. Last entry was 2016.