All Comments on 'Fallen Ch. 05'

The seizure threw me, didn't even know that was a thing but it turns out it is. Good job keep it up.

I like the story so far, but her being so attached to him and giving up so easily just doesn't make sense. stockholm wouldn't happen after three days.

good writing though! and very hot sex.

Please finish the story! Great story want to know more about them.

I like it!!

I especially love the hot bone curling sex!! Very descriptive and kinky. She needs to make an escape attempt. Viola can't go out like that. She needs to fight him. I think perhaps she gets away, ends up back at the bar and runs into Leon again. Maybe he could turn out to be her Guardian Angel/Stalker? Or go the route of her being a house sex slave which I think is a bit boring. But the way you write is Fantastic, even the very few writing mistakes didn't bother me.

Leon cares deeply for her and I think that is sweet. Viola is stubborn and I like that. She should keep up that defiant streak. But its your "master"piece..so whatever you write will be statically twisted and badass!! Keep it coming :-D

Really liked this story seems like the characters were made for each other but its going kinda slow please write more

Are you gonna continue this story

C'mon now. You certainly have enough mental material to add or complete this submission. Especially enjoyed the mental thought process interspersed with the characters responses and actions with each other. It drew me into the the complexity of two muddled souls.

Really enjoyed this. In my estimation you have a minimum of two more chapters to wrap it up nicely but enough that you can go on for more. I hope you choose to come back and finish this.

Come back and finish this story!! I love Leons character and would love to watch Viola finally submit for good!

can't wait for the escape attempt!

Great story, please do update!

Looking forward to seeing more of Leon and Viola.

Loved it! Was hoping that there would have been a part 6 by now. Not rushing ya, only hoping for a conclusion or more in this wonderful tale of both becoming D/s