All Comments on 'Femme Fatale'

she's twenty and makes the statement for as long as i can remember, how long is that a week. Your twenty and already your a loser.

i cum almost as much as she did, what fuck scene

You know other ANONYMOUS, learn how to spell & then post another STUPID comment. Or maybe, write your own story so that I can comment on your lack of talent, how's that? This story is so fucken HOT, I have to agree with Cheryl_4fun. I am still "cumming"! Looking forward to see the next story by Femerotic.

Hi Cheryl_4fun & Other Anonymous

I appreciate the positive comments, keep watching, busy with the next chapter.

Femerotic

Yes, Femme Fatale is quite provocative and enjoyable. ... As noted on the next story, quotation marks on the dialog would greatly help readability, but otherwise, most of the story is nicely done. ...

Note a correction:

Screaming my second release, I grinded (sic) ground his mouth into my spurting pussy. ...

We hope you keep writing and growing, Femerotic!

jurra jussus meisie, maar ja laat 'n man heerlik voel. Heeltemal TOTAAL!

Tweede lees en nog 'n dik stywe piel en lekkervoel met dankbaarheid.

Sinne soos:

Roughly pushing me forward again, no warning, he rammed his 10 inch fat cock inside of my tight pulsing pussy. Pain & pleasure mingled in my overly sensitized body.

Jy skop gat, Meisie, en jy skop dit hard.

Mooi werk. Mooi,mooi werk en my hele liggam voel so lekker.

Very hot story! " . . . staying on the sharp edge of undiluted lust." I loved that image! Nicely phrased. A couple of things distracted me, though . . . the absence of quotations, as noted in another comment, as well as the use of "&" instead of "and." I thought it gave what could have been an excellent story a rather immature feel. All in all, however, I like the way the author's naughty mind works and will look forward to more of her stories.

This is simply one of the hottest reads on lit. Very well written, very hot.*****