All Comments on 'Fire Ch. 01'

Very good! I pretty much didnt want it to end! Looking forward to the next chapter.

enjoyed everything about it. the description of the characters, the emotion, the dialogue. everything! thanx for ths. i can hardly wait for the next installment. def going onto my favs list.

wow! That's what kept going through my mind while reading it! You have a great talent for details and emotions. The way you portray your characters is believable which is kind of difficult considering that i have never seen a human being sacrificed nor have i seen a vampire. I like that you didn't portray your heroine as a whiny little naive girl but rather someone who have spirit and the strength to face her own fears.

Lucy

Simply stated this Author has talent and I hope this will be just the beginning of many works to be pen-ed by her hand. She has command of her characters and has thought out the flow of her story line. We will I hope see more of this unfolding saga soon!

So here I am reading your story and you know what you did? You stopped!!!! I'm loving this story right now so if you don't mind could you please right some more soon???!!!!!

A great start to a story. Thanks for going deeply into the story and not stopping after one Lit. page. I really got a good understanding of the characters and I'm definitely hooked! Thanks for writing!

I loved everything about this story.

Thank you for sharing it!

I liked it. . . is there more?

I actually love this story. For a first time writer or first time submitting a story through this site I think you did a very good job! I really do not know what to suggest to you until I read another chapter from you, from this story. Sooo i'll give my suggestion in when the next time you submit a chapter.

Great job again!

I really like your story and am hoping that you will continue.

The only problem I had with it was at the beginning it was hard to picture the scene because I was having trouble placing a time frame. I kept trying to picture it as modern day at first. Maybe a few words about her village or a mention of horses and carts..... just something to help pick an era and paint the picture. Otherwise a very, very good start. Can't wait to see how the relationship builds from here.

Please post the next chapter soon!

do not stop writing. i loved every word.

Great story. Can't wait for the next one!

I like the story very much. It has a nice character and plot build-up so far, and everything looks very promising. Please do continue with more chapters!

Hey there,

Loved the story please pretty please continue, would love to read more. I really like your style, and the difference to the usual vampire tales. You really brought out his "humanity" so to speak. Can't wait until the next submission.

Keep well

S

This story is great! I would definitely buy this at a bookstore! Keep them coming!

I loved it please continue!

You really bring out the vampire's humanity.

This is an outstanding beginning to what appears to be a wonderful story. [But I am going to gripe at you about some rather distracting writing flaws, namely homonyms. Get a dictionary and straighten out boarder/border, too/to, week/weak, peak/peek, and probably a few others. You can't rely on spellcheck for these, because they're all legitimate words. But they do have separate meanings.] That gripe aside, this story is absolutely delightful, and I'm off to read Ch.02.

-- KK in Texas

Keep the lengthy chapters coming!

I've just come across your work and feel like I've chanced upon a hidden treasure trove. You remind me of Clive Barker in your humanising the supposed 'monster' vampire and revealing the monsterous things humans can do. Thank you for the feast in words, emotions and creativity.

beautiful work and quite intriguing

This is a truly beautiful beginning. I love the depth that you've created in your characters. You've built an entire world out of well-chosen words and your writing skills are patently obvious. I would suggest you run right out and write professionally, but I KNOW how difficult that is; agents tend to be so rushed that they're daft to genius like yours. If you ever do try, though, I wish you the best luck and I'll certainly pick up a copy of one of your books. :-)

I just began to read this and it is amazing! I love it! I love the way that you use language and play with words - I am already excited to continue reading. I think I might have to read it all in one sitting - it flows so well! You use words as if you've delicately picked them out and lovingly placed them on the page and the effect is fantastic! The depth that you create to your characters is so well done, and with such strategic revelation that it makes the reader want to be right there with them. PLEASE keep more coming, and I absolutely agree with everyone else - you must become a professional writer, right now. Please keep sharing your art with the world!

I'm liking this story a lot!!!

Well written, with a very cute ending! I've become curious, I will continue...

Will have to read the rest :)

I am so glad I pulled your story up to read. It is beautiful and so well written.

This is good, I hope vengence comes to the idiots who hurt her. I always love seeing fools like them get what they deserve.

One of the best I have read in a while - would have given 10 but the ratings only go up to 5

This is a wonderfully written story, I love it!

How in the world have I been checking yearly for updates to Hunting the Hunter and not read Fire? In a way I’m happy though, because it’s a privilege to be able to read your work as if it’s brand new. What a gift during this quarantine lol