by Tepin
My girlfriend fingers my ass from time to time as she sucks my cock. I've always loved it and you've described it very well. I think we'll have to try the dildo thing next!
Great, story, but you skimp on the details that I want to hear the most about. Tell me more about fucking her ass! What does it feel like exactly? Spend a LOT more time on this!
Tell us more about her pushing back on your dick as you fuck her ass, the sounds she makes, the sensations in your cock etc.
I enjoyed reading your anal romp per say...
Wish you wouldn of described or detailed the fucking her in the ass a little more..as you did ur anal experience.. Bt overall good write
You've got a lot of detail already, but it decreases at the end.
I know that's likely because you're excited, and many authors will sped up the pace as they reach the climax - much like sex - but remember your readers are not inside your sensual organs, so they want to "feel" the details of her anus around your cock, the slight ridges, the looser area after the muscular rings, the way those rings feel on the ridges of your cock, etc. Perhaps mention slight changes in angle to increase sensation...
That kind of stuff!
Why'd she use a 10" one the first time though? Kinda intense for anal cherry popping. That aside, she was very upfront with the deal and she followed through with both ends of it! 5 our 5 <3
It appears that this was your first story on Lit. What a great beginning! I'm about half way through your outstanding collection. Most are among the best I've read on Lit. I know I'll be sad when I finish all of them. Just keep writing so that doesn't happen.