All Comments on 'First Date'

Hot story. Great first time story. Hope to see more from you. A little editing would improve it.

For a first submission this is very good. I would like to see a bit more detail but that is just my taste. One thing, drop the LOL, This is not a text message where you get charged by the word.

This was a good story...I look forward to reading more from you. Welcome to the site, as a fellow Lit author.

It si a real sexy , soft tale . I enjoyed it very much . This girl is really sexy and I love her .

Sra_Marian

Thanks for the story.

For your first time, you manage your story well, though I prefer a little longer foreplay and a little more creativity with the love-making.

It sounds as though it makes you hot writing it (and we're feeling pretty warm reading it!), so take some more time and draw out the entire act.

As they say, everything comes to those who wait ...