All Comments on 'First Time for Holly'

A lot of the paragraphs were too long and hard to read..

Dear swingtime91,

Thanks for an awesome story. Very well done. Would love to hear more about Holly and Abbey. Thanks again for the hardon!

Cranky

crankyandtesty@hotmail.com

Well done, but I agree on the length of the paragraphs. A good guide is 5-12 lines, coversation can be less of course. Keep writing!

I found the story well written with no mistakes great going

swingtime91

Pat

I hate you because you made me cum all over myself.

Hot story!

great story