by UncoolCass
Great story line. A little abrupt in the transition from building up to sex. Could easily be a longer story. You should do a part II on the retrieval of the handcuff key.
You built a good story line, but the abrupt transition takes away from it. Building the storyline more and detailing the sex will improve upon your already great idea. How does the key being in the vagina come into play?
This could have been very hot, but the pacing was very flawed. If the scene were doubled in length and detail, I imagine it would be a great read.
It's a nice beginning but then it goes from virgin fingering to Dp with huge dildos?
Handcuff her and tease her til she loses it...