All Comments on 'Freedom'

Now what the hell did I just read!!!!!! Thanks for sharing.

But it was a terrible tale about an unsatisfied fucking cunt whore slut cheating wife who deserted her family for four months and now returns to her clueless husband a fucking skank who deserves to be dead. Write a well written chapter 2 where Paul the husband finds out and throws her out face first.

DAMN

The wife does not think well on consequences and many a wife alike falls deep into dire mental depression or keep to the curb -no cheater escape this fate.

This story-1*

No slut bitch story is well written. Loved only by wimpy guys.

everyone for your comments.

Maddie is a deeply flawed character and I'm thrilled that her controversial method to 'survive' prompted each and every one of you to give me some feedback. When I wrote this piece, I was not holding Maddie up to be a heroine, simply a deeply depressed woman struggling to fight suicide. Right or wrong, she is aware that her actions lead towards uncertainty in her marriage, but she is so entrenched in her depression that she is willing to take the risk, despite the fact that ultimately no good can come from her choices.

Thank you again for taking the time to read my story and for giving me some feedback.

A little too bleak for my taste, but I enjoyed the writing. Thanks.

... but it was a well conceived and executed story. I think an author simply whoring him/herself with Burn the Bitch LW stories, or Pathetic Wimp LW stories (let's get some complexity here, guys) or multiorgasmic virgins - usually rape victims

It is possible to pump out a two thousand word story every few days if the plot is essentially the same, and most of the two thousand words are stroke memes - no originality sought or accepted

The story WAS bleak - maybe a bit over the top toward the end - the narrator chained in a dungeon gang-raped by dozens of men - STDs anybody? But all in all, so much better than the typical Literotica fare

horrible characters. How stupid is Paul? How much of a selfish bitch is our narrator? What's the point of writing a letter to someone who is dead? Your language and word choice are excellent, but the story you are telling is lacking. Hey, depressed? Go to a fetish club and get your brains fucked out whilst abandoning your family and threatening (ruining??) your marriage. Yes, clearly she is as intelligent as she thinks she is, offering some great advice- NOT! I understand that you wanted this to be a brief vignette, but her lack of remorse, or rather her inability to have learned a real lesson in appreciating what she has keeps her no better than a child, and we don't know enough of Paul to determine if he has the strength and maturity to sustain his family and protect his kids. This lady is heading for a mental breakdown, but she narrates the tale expecting us to be envious of her depravity and lack of integrity? Don't think so, but maybe that's just me. Hope Paul is up-to-date with his STD testing, and can trust and rely on his sister to help with the kids while he negotiates the divorce. Good luck!

I think you captured the path of self destructive behavior brought on by depression very well.

We all do it. We all fantasize ways to escape. From what? To what? It doesn't matter. The alarm clock goes off in the morning and life goes on.

The French (who are good at arrogance and wine and whine) have a nickname for orgasm...the little death! It seems that undisciplined, meaningless sex, for any significant length of time, is a remarkably ineffective way to fight depression! I should think the contrary. When you take the foundations of hope and continuance and growth out of sex, it has to get old - fast!

I will (kinda) forgive the format, since actual conversation has been pre-empted by Oliver's act - but it DOES read like a self-indulgent defense! Granted, a very good one!

If she did kill herself, too bad. -5!

Luckily for us all that an extremely lot of people have the psychopathology of Oliver and the "wife" in this story. The vast majority of people seek love, affection, respect and honor in our lifetimes. The behavior that the "wife" sought from others and was was very willing for herself to perform has nothing to do with the aforementioned items. For some reason and no doubt very deep seated, the wife was looking for what is diametrically opposed to the majority of humans on the planet. For her she yearned for rapid, deep meaningless sex acts and more degrading to her personally the more she felt fulfilled. Advice to the "husband" run screaming into the night, your wife is beyond being a slut and without a great deal of mental health help she will never be worthy to be someone's wife

but i didnt like that she is planning another trip. That killed the story for me. The husband may be hiding his head under the sand but I dont think he will take another one of her trips.

This story is diferent to those often found on this site...it makes thereader think and work at it. Liked it...keep doing stuff!

What would she say if he had done what she did? Would she have looked on it the same way?

A very poetic take on that stage in life when we realize we have become our parents despite our thoughtful decision and intent never to be so mundane as to gain pleasure from conformity.

There is more than 1 person in this equation, for every action there is a counter reaction. Maybe alot..

plots

themes

climaxes

anti-climaxes

make an outline of your stories first with these items in mind. I have a good feeling about your writting growth.....bill

Motherhood is slavery. Promiscuity is freedom. Time for a trip to the brain store.

This a sad story of a woman trapped domesticity and not really appreciated by her husband and given some real love and care as the husband is so engrossed in his own career and aims he doesn't realise the importance of giving her a break from her treadmill, a nice evening out dancing or a social occasion where she could interact with other people and make friends. Instead her needs are ignored so she takes the extreme curse of sex clubs to try to fill her vacuum. She won't be the first to do this or even be the last.

a slut how only carried about sex and her lover then leaves her kids maybe the last comment should read the story lol

So tell me, how long till she takes off the "find herself" again? How long till Paul has had enough? How long till she gets to see her kids every other weekend by court order? How long till the kids rave about a new "mommy"?

How long till she doesn't want to be alone and wants her old boring life back? How long till she seeks the same path to freedom as Oliver?