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Anonymousover 9 years agoMinor beefs
Your plotting and writing are so well done that I'm ashamed to make a couple of small criticisms. A few commas would help the flow, and be a little more careful distinguishing between 'to' and 'too'.
1DurtyMuthaover 9 years agoAuthorRe: Minor beefs
That's a common complaint and I'm working on it. Thank you for the compliment though and never be afraid to criticize constructively.
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