by kanatawolf
A fairly good story line that could be interesting, and an intriguing title.
Please get an editor to help you revise it and remove the most blatant grammatical errors and misuses of standard English writing conventions. Your dialogue could be good with some work and proper punctuation.
Sadly as it is, it is almost unreadable.
I refrained from voting at this point. I hope you will revise it so I can give it the stars it deserves.
Reading in 2022 shows me that you haven't edited the story as recommended. Too bad.