by idoit2myself
Excellent writing, truly not sloppy at all! Idk what the other commenter is on about lol
Some very intense sex. But some very sloppy writing. Please take a class in writing the English language.
I will admit that I am a bit of a perfectionist, especially when it comes to spelling!!! But a story that makes me that horny, it sure doesn't interrupt the flow. I really loved this story!! Keep it up!!!
I'm a female, who's obviously horny most of the time. If she didn't get disgusted at having another guy pound into her, AND came on top of that, then she wanted it.
Aw, why don't we give this a nice score of 5. None of us Anonymous guys are experts anyway. Let's all play nice. Us anonymous guys have no idea how to write a story, we just like to play like we know. You just keep writing.
any future stories, make sure to proof read and spell check first. All the typos disrupted the flow quite a bit.
the object of these stories are fancies nothing more if your dick gets hard then the writer succeeded in what they were attempting
Blow off the negative comments and continue to write.