by Esperanza_Hidalgo
Great job Raney!
I see you've been working hard. This is great. Me being me, of course I'd want it to move a bit more slowly, but I write novels. You'd have enough in this to expand into a novel, if you wanted to. Great story!
Love Tery
But there are a lot of grammatical stumbles throughout. Typos, I'm certain, but something an editor should take a look at.
Shame on me for looking at it from a publishing point of view but, well, I can't help myself. Good character development and story though, although I'd have liked a little more about Rachel and a little less with the unseasonably wise (and equally naive) coeds. That's just me and an opinion though, so take it as you will.
I especially liked how screwed up the main character was. Damaged goods makes for great material! Not to mention something a reader can easily identify with.
for the comments. Feedback helps me improve, and I welcome constructive attempts to help make me a better writer.
Espie
Good storyline.The ending was kinda abrupt but it was well done.One of the best I'm sure.
This story isn't only hot, it pulled on some heartstrings too in the skillfulness you've demonstarted in your writing. Thank you for sharing such a wonderful talent with us.
Something in my subconscious just came to the forefront after reading this story. Being gay is (like) love, it just is... I can not turn you gay no more than you can turn me straight, it just is... I am...You are... without definition or qualifiers.
I like your prose and how you describe the lesbian discovery of a mature college professor. The threesome between the teacher and the students is so arousing. Please write more on this subject.