All Comments on 'Green Eyes Ch. 01'

Very good so far; please continue writing, but shouldn't this story be under "Mind Control" or SciFI/Fantasy?

Tantalizing even. I just have one criticism, the word literally is both mis and over used in everyday language and in this story. But this is highly erotic writing, very charged writing if you could use a word other than literally it would be more fluid. But again good job, well done and I hope to read more.

Through... no thru. This isn't a text message.

Hope you are writing up a storm of new and more delicious chapters.....