by Toolmo
Unfortunately, the appalling writing had this hovering around the 2 stars mark, almost until the end. The last couple of lines pulled it up enough to warrant 3 stars - but only if there's a Part II, and only if the writing improves, (a lot).
I don't care how you wrote it, it's message was clear, and my "cockometer" responded accordingly.
Looking forward to further contributions.
You have what it takes to post here and then some.
melsdad
This story was brilliant! I can hardly wait to read part 2. In the meantime have you a cure for a sore cock?