All Comments on 'Hand Jobs 101 Ch. 02'

This should be better. Jodie turned into Jody. Site was never used correctly; the word you want is sight. And shear perfection would be an excellent job of cutting something off, hardly what the narrator would want! Sheer perfection would be ever so much better and would contribute to his pleasure. Finally, since when do cheerleaders wear lacy tights under their skirts?

Hoping you can make these changes.

One orgasm for all that writing...and it was genius!