All Comments on 'Having Fun with Dycke and Payne Ch. 07'

and paid no attention to the timings of the postings from the author so I too can't figure out why at least one person didn't comment.

It is fun, what more can you want from a story. Great romance it isn't. You have gaps in the story line but you may well fill those in in the many future chapters. So until I get there, it is hard for me to tell you what I think of the story. Over the top characters are hard to connect with. Hard to tell how any of us would react to having so much power, I can only hope I'd stay grounded but who knows.

I'm having fun reading this and your other stories but your punctuation, spelling and grammar are horrible. However, at least you stick to the story line. I'm curious as well as why there is but one other comment.

This story, like the others of your that I have read, are really fun. The only negative thing I can say is the they need better editing. Other than that, I love your stories. Keep them coming.

Great story...great panache...I'm still hooked!!!

I really enjoy reading the stories that you write. However, the sex scene involving Bob shooting whipped cream into Fiona's vagina & ass is dangerous as it introduces air that can cause an embolism as well as bacteria from the cream leading to a yeast infection.

Great Story, BUT . . .

Speech Recognition Software and Dictated Stories require CAREFUL Reading and ReReading by the Author PRIOR TO Editing by someone else.

Without that . . . Readers are forced to struggly through easily avoidable mistakes in the Authors Initial Verbal draft, and it is painfully obvious why they are there. . . lazyness.

These easily avoidable glitches mar otherwise great stories and good writing.and make the author look like an amateur rushing homework, So STOP IT !!!

Ab

I an sick to death of anonymous critics slating good stories on this site. These people should be totally ignored/ This story is superb!!!

I totally agree with the comment by anonymous on 11/21/16. Start from the end and read backwatds to the start slowly. That will catch most of your errors. The lost endings of sentences are a problem of slopy profing.

Great story very interesting. Taking a young clean cut

Kid and his family and then putting all the weird sexual

Behavior and semi orgy really takes away from his image and the story in general. Having Payne always yelling and throwing things is getting old too, but I do love the story. Thanks!!

Ed

Enjoyed the story completely, with the sure and certain knowledge that it was fiction in its entirety, I was able to willfully disconnect my "dis-belief" and immerse myself in it. Much like your other submissions, some of the dialog repeats what the character just pondered...a little too often. Your placement of commas for pauses could be a bit distracting. But like I said - full immersion in the story. For me that means I'm able to disconnect from my OCD long enough to enjoy it completely! I am sorry, but you asked. So I'm a grammar jerk... Still loved it enough for multiple reads. This aint no 'tug tale'!

Where the hell has the storyline went to ? ? ? That whole chapter was side tracked garbage . Please return to the original premise and leave old Bob along the sidelines somewhere ... Another 2 star rating !