by egabrag
This was artsy-fartsy in the extreme. I never knew what was going on.
And who the hell is Mayil? She showed up three times and vanished.
This was clearly written by someone with a very skewed world view...
You covered a lot of subjects of cultures I know nothing about. But it's still a good read.
the story could have been told probably with a few more details but it is good as it is. None of the usual bad grammar and careless syntax and general verbal infelicities. The cultural problems are not onesided, in any caseThe writer may take the help of a reader who understands what the western reader is unlikely to understand.