by LeanneSinclair
Wow ... super well written and not a bit of a bummer. Hated your prior but equally well written piece; just too over the top evil and not a bit beleivable. Loved the characertizations in this peice and very believalbe!! Despite the fact that I know that this is fiction, I have to exert a bit of self control not to "worry" about David and wonder if Helen ends up working as a "maid." Thanks.
A strangely believable story, and one that seems to really need a follow-up. Does the act lead to David coming out of his shell and being released, possibly in his sister's "custody"? Does he seek Angie's ministrations, with Helen also present, leading to more intimacy with his sister; and, soon, to more overt sexuality. I hope we'll soon learn more about these two. Or three.
I seldom award a five. This thoroughly deserved it. Everything about it was right. Thank you.
makes this a jewel of a story. The dialog was absolutely believable. Every scene was believeable. This calls for a follow up. It would be most interesting to see the reserved Helen, middle age and fleshy from the sound of it, a sexless breaucrat, continue her healing of David when he is released.
Wow, this really was quite professional.
You must try getting this published in the UK. Very literary. Like some of the big names in modern British literature.
Dare we hope for a sequel in which David and Helen are shown enjoying both cohabitation and coition? That would be bloody marvellous!
Nice story, slow buildup to the sex nicely crafted. Now we need a continuation to develop the relationship between the introverted David and his very sexual sister. I look forward to more from you.
Yes; not a lot of sex, but thepremise and story did not require such. There is room for developement of several possible additional directions; bro-sis, sis and maid staff, sis-Angie, Bro-Ang/ developing relationship, and so on... Great writing that held the readers interest. Thank you.
dont put Helen to work in the prozzie business. she needs to spend the time with david and taking care of herself so she doesn't crash and burn.
I think your writing is the cleanest I've seen on Literotica. I do hope you'll favor us with more stories.
What an extraordinary story. To begin with, the characters are all so likeable and nice to each other that for a moment one can forget just how utterly twisted the premise is - sex between a woman, her psychologically damaged brother, and a prostitute procured with the connivance of his doctor? I actually liked the long build-up because the dialogue and characterisation were so convincing. In fact I think I may be in love with Angie. I also noticed motifs echoing back and forth through the text. Not just Helen's recollection of the terms "maid watching" and "oral without", but, for example, in the pub Angie swears once and says "pardon my language", but in the sex scene she treats David to a pornographic tirade. At the very beginning the doctor tells Helen to take care of herself, and at the end she does exactly that. In fact I think the whole episode is as much a healing of Helen as it is of David. Also words like "mad", "crazy", "insane" keep cropping up as a sort of background music. This is some piece of writing. I can also confirm, from personal experience, that the portrayal of the terminology and conventions of the London prostitution scene is pretty authentic, so I commend the author on her research (aided by the real Angie?) as well as her storytelling.
One of the best stories I've read on this site for a long, long time! Thank you author.
Beautiful sexy story and I would love to read more about these characters. The brother and sister dynamic was fascinating and the sweet black tart was a treat also. I think all three of them need to get together again. Yes I am greedy. 5 stars
This is such a wonderful story, unlike many of the others here. I greatly enjoyed reading this and it was very well written. Thanks!
i know its a great ending but i needed more. i needed to get better and get out of the clinic. i needed angie, david, his sister and angies daughter to become an a blended family. i know thats not the point but i really felt that's where it should go. they have all suffered so why not let them being together to be happy because there is no judgement from any of them towards one another.
Thank you, a magnificent story and well written. So realistic is like being there - and the eroticism at the right level. PLEASE - some follow up with David , after discharge and Helen
I had no idea that I would enjoy your story when I found it. You have a gift. I though from the title it would be younger brother and sister. I am happy to have been wrong. Well done and thank you.
The introduction made it sound like this is a 9 page story when it is barely three. Page two I just lost interest. *