by AmbersSexyLove
Thank you guys! WOW! 6 favs. Never thought it would get that many. Sorry I sorta ditched it, been a bit busy with life. But I will start working on the second chapter tonight (should be in this time next week) thank you guys!
he rode a bus and didn't bring a change of clothes? has no phone because? if it's a beach house (more like mansion) where is it in relation to the place "James" is going to? When he got off the bus how did he get to her beach house? she lets him in to use her phone but he doesn't make a call, takes a shower and changes into her clothes instead?
plot holes big enough for a lorry to drive through.
Okay.......You got a good start. Now you need to finish it. You left a big hole on what happens next. Please finish this.