All Comments on 'Hell, Yeah: Shaun's Story Ch. 1'

You lucky lucky girl.

Though this was totally unexpected, it's lovely to hear from one of my favourite characters again!

Sexy as hell, as always.

Zera

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If you see her name on a story, read it! With her command of the language, her imagination, and her ability to describe situations, she has all the tools of the trade. Little things like the discription "the pad of my thumb" are so vivid and so seldom seen. She's very good.

I love this idea - the same story from the man's point of view. And he's such a sweetie! And the story was hot, hot, hot as usual.

I'm so glad you came back to this story! I was missing Shaun! He's such a sweetie! Love the point of view from Shaun.

You do rock girl. I love this story. Keep it up.

A nice "twist" reading the story from the guy's point of view. Keep up the great writing!

I smiled all the way through this story I really enjoyed it. I liked the first verision but as a women I really enjoy his point of view.

What a great and awesome story. Naughty but nice.

Late to the table but glad I got here. Thanks to DK for telling me about your stories. This is a fine tale with enjoyable characters and great dialog. The humor makes the story better and more realistic. DK and HDK are correct, we need to see more from you, it's always fun to watch a new writer come in with talent and then grow. Very well done!

Excellent story!

telling the story from shaun's point of view was brilliant. I always enjoy your stories. keep up the good work!

It was so fitting for you to pen this, the story was excellent. Funny, engaging, and filled with Shaun and Jackie as two very likable characters who were so hot for each other but fit as lovers and friends, loved this story.

Great twist on an already good story.

like reading both sides but feel liek i'm waiting forever for the rest, please tell us your going to finish it!

Good dialog and very descriptive. Thanks for a good story.

I really like getting to read both sides of the story. I like the different perspectives and you get more of who the character is. I like what you've written, but it would be even better if you just intertwined this submission with the first chapter. And continue Shaun's point of view to the other chapters as well.

I found your story via Evanslily. I really like it. I read the first version, and just now Shaun's story.

Very well written.

Whatever you're doing, just stop it right now and get your fingers dancing across the keyboard. Write more, dammit! Hurry!

I read the novelette about the architect and the one about the porn author and the editor, and now this one about the barmaid. It's a tossup which one I liked best. The architect story had interesting subplots, while the barmaid story had more of a cuddly quality. They were all way too short.

Speaking of short, you really sucker punched me right between the eyes with that short story about the nude painting.

So far, I haven't found any of your stuff that I don't like.

If I finish your life work before you write more, what will become of me? Will I have to go back to reading inferior stories from authors who've never been with a woman, maladroit nerds who've gained all their worldly knowledge of the fair ones of the species from reading other ridiculous, trashy stories? Please, please, spare me that!

loved this chapter shaun is soo fucking hott when he's insecure

Firstkiss,

yes, like a first kiss - that is kind of what it feels like, reading your work. I am through all your art now, started with the Tanners, went over the architects and ended here with Shaun's side of this story. I have been writing for years and love it so much, only that I was never into erotic stories myself. Oh, well - sure I have read them, mainly here on Literotica, but never tried myself to write any.

You.. you are so standing out amongst the others because you have this special gift to first-kiss people into a never ending want. A good writer can still make many mistakes and have help to develop the finest art but he definitely needs something no one else can give:

This absolute ability to fill his words with those feelings I can surely feel between your lines. Congratulations, you are an amazing writer and I would love to see more of your work.

Finally, dear firstkiss, you made me a fan and I am going to wait eagerly for more.. ~smiles~.

And if you wonder about my bad english: I am not native speaking and truly sorry that thus I will never be able to create something as beautiful as you did here...

Truly great.

With a happy smile and warm greetings..

The husky

5 years, pretty much, since you wrote this so I'm guessing you won't finish the story but I'd love it if you did, you're a great writer x Isobel

Really really hoping you will finish this and other stories, you're amazing :) xx

So sorry you seem to be gone. Your writing is flawless.

Your writing is flawless, but so is hers! I will read more from both of these fine authors. They create characters and situations that I thoroughly enjoy!

Gary13

Yes, please!

I'm enjoying them enjoying each other!

I'm enjoying You!