All Comments on 'Helping My Baby Girl'

Sounds like it was written by a virgin

I'm disgusted with this story and also concerned why is rape OK it never is I have been a victim of a sex attack 17 years ago I don't want to go into details but never ever say rape is ok. It never is OK it ruins lives

This sounds like it was written by a teenager. Sleeped? Cummed? Your spelling and grammar are atrocious!!! And who would be ok with it that Sam's father raped her friend, got her pregnant and they get married and have 3 kids? I hope you haven't quit your day job.

" and it was unmistakable that she just cummed."

"I sleeped great that night"

Meh

It seemed to "pragmatic" to be a fantasy. I don't see many people reading this as turned on at the end, as they were at the beginning. The sexual concept is solid. But the "now i'm married to her, since they notice that the baby looks just like me and my daughter. and by the way, they are both okay with what happened." part just left me with too much WTF to enjoy it. Write more stories, you have a good concept going with the access to the pharmacy. Run your text through grammar/spell check too.

Pretty average, I gotta say.

One thing I noticed in the story is that you had the word T-H-E-R-E a lot when you should have put T-H-E-I-R. I hope English is your second language because if it isn't you need to slap your former English teachers.

I liked the concept, and I would encourage you to keep writing. But the other commenters are right when they say you need to pay more attention to spelling/grammar, and that you need an editor. Also, conclusions are tough, but they're important. Yours was quick even by the standards of a short stroke story.

A poor story , poorly written.

dude that ls just weird

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The author needs to have an editor. There are too many mistakes to be "mistakes."

"...me and Jenny married..." is simply a lack of knowledge of proper grammar.

check your spelling; there are a lot of errors ... and dude, he's fucked in the head.