All Comments on 'High School Again? Ugh! Ch. 02'

fairly well written, but I don't understand the hero's thoughts. He's 18 again but wants to act and be treated 30. He knows his girlfriend is going to cheat but still wants to try, even though he has other (and better) options. He knows he's going to be seriously injured playing football but still wants to play, even though he (again) has other options. He'd be better off with track or soccer (which he coached). And his continued concern with his situation is laughable. Accept that you are 18 again, live your life, but use what you've learned to live it better. I don't think the author is handleing the whole thing very well. The whole point in going back in time is to learn from your mistakes and do it better but this guy hasn't learned anything and is making the same mistakes he made the first time around. Having been an SF fan for the past 30 years, maybe I'm used to the time paradox or accustumed to writters who handle the situation better but while I sort of enjoy the story I don't think it's been well thought out

I think the author is handling things PERFECTLY. It's the lead character who isn't. I mean... Some of us know exactly what we'd do and are OK with the idea of going back in time. Others would fuck it up and make the same mistakes slightly differently. I do hope he is smart enough to save his knee though.

I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this story, and hope that it stays complex but has an enjoyable ending.

I hope the question of when, if ever, he's 'going back' will be resolved. The goddess showing up in disguise and subtly asking would be cool.

Oh to be young again. Very interesting story development with all the experience and the opportunity to understand and work through the problems and having the discipline to not change history, but to relive it, warts and all.

Look forward the balance of your story.

Many guys have considered what it would be like to wake up at an early age and re-live part of their life.

The author is doing very well. I look forward to future chapters.

I think the author is handling (not handeling) the storyline very well. He is introducing interesting adult issues and concerns, such as his parent's and sister's possible futures, but mixing in some fun and games that a hormone driven teenager would appreciate.

Besides, it's HIS story and would even make a terrific novel with some care and fleshing out, as it were. It's a fun concept and I can't wait for more. Good work, JD!

.... but he's pretty sure he knows when it began & WHY. So, what does he do? I say correct your past mistakes BUT break up w/her before she cheats, quit the football team & GO for the other girl he's begun to like. Oh, yeah, take up 'track'. At least he'll save a bundle in alimony & maybe things WILL work out for him, who knows?

... if you add a new variable in it.

@some commenters:

Unless his knee had a predisposition for damage, which was not lampshaded, he's not likely to blow it out again. What was lampshaded however was the fullback. Wouldn't be surprised if he was the one responsible for the knee in the original time line.

He also has a fair chance to make things work this time with Tiffany. But Tara looks very interesting too and she's apparently more mature than Tiffany to boot. I'm personally strongly biased to Tara at this point because, other than John currently loving Tiffany, she seems much more compatible.

I do hope that he gets into Ms Valente's panties, mine was hot as well, and into Connie's again. Great work JD! Looking forward to more.

I love the internal debate between the 18 year old and the 30 year old trying to inhabit the same body. What an interesting concept to go back in time with the knowledge that we possess today. How would you handle it? What if anything would you do different? Will the future change? Looking forward to seeing how the story plays out...what happens with Tara, Tiffany, Cindy, Brad, Rodger and John's knee/football. Please post again soon. Thoroughly enjoying this story!

A very good continuation of the first chapter. Hurry up and quit goofing off, get the next chapter posted. Seriously it reads well and is thought provoking. I'm looking forward to the next chapters. Thanks for your hard work.

woodmanone

Okay, so I don't usually comment on my own stories, but then again I've never done an entry in this category before and I think a little clarification into my thought process might help some of the readers.

I could have written a light story about a guy getting thrown into the past and having a grand old time. I may still do it one day, but I doubt it would fit into this category. The conflicted feelings of John are what makes it possible, at least for me, to make this a longer entry.

Some of you are picking up on things I'm forshadowing and jumping the gun. That's understandable. However, a story of this length gives me time to develop a more complex plot. There are things that are going to happen that will make you say, "I knew it!". There are also things that will happen that if I'm lucky, will make you say, "Wow! That's so cool! I didn't expect that!"

Have patience and I think (hope) most of you will be happy with where this goes.

Regards,

JD

I love it. I love the depth of this story. Life is more then sex and football, even at the age of 18. I hope the chapters can be submitted at a fairly regular pace. You have me hooked and am eager to see how John deals with his new chance at life.

I like the story, its an interesting take on an old question.

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Very much looking forward to the next installment. Unlike the other comment, for me it feels very realistic. It is easy to say that you would do it in a certain way, but in real life we all make some bad choices even when we know better.

I like the story. john's niece isn't going to be the same even if cindy hooks up with that guy again. unless you believe the exact same sperm will find its way into the egg.

like how you portrayed john's confusion as to whether he's going insane suffering from some sort of delusion or if he's really in the past.

it's interesting to see his interaction with his family and the emotional effect it has on him.

It seems my favorite stories on this website are novel length, and I can usually tell by the first page if I am going to enjoy the story or not. This is one of those stories I know I will be checking for updates on a regular basis. Very well written, interesting plot, good character development, and a lot of possibilities.

I just pray that you do not stop writing while the story remains unfinished. Too many of my favorite stories are at that point right now. I'm stuck checking for an update that will probably never come, while searching for something to carry my imagination. Good work ;)

Keep it up, Joe!

I enjoy that you are giving a lot of thought to how John is dealing with being 18 again with his older mind and memories. I very much enjoyed his reconnection with his parents and sister. I do love not knowing exactly where you are going with the story since you obviously have many directtions you could take the story. I noticed that you didn't specify how old John was in his older life. I noticed that one reader stated 30, but I feel John must have been at least his mid 40s. John is five years older than his sister and his neice is in college. So I'm guessing his sister in her older life was about 40, with John about 45. It would be nice if you could mention how old John was at the start of the story since I feel the age difference is an important factor in this story. I enjoy the conflict between John's old feeling for Tiffany and his new developing feelings for Tara. Of course, other not-yet-seen relationships could also develop. Thanks for an enjoyable, thought provoking read - I look forward to what I hope will be frequent chapters.

PLease don't make us wait too long. I love the character developement and the story potential is great.

If there was such a category, this one would be on top

I love a lot of your pieces on this site, but this is one of my favorites thus far. Can't wait for future chapters, hope it is as enjoyable for you to write as it is for me to read.

Joe, I have read several of your stories, and enjoyed them, esp. the saving the company series, this one is really pulling me in. Keep up the good work, hopefully my fellow readers and I will be patient enough you don't feel rushed.

This is a great story. I am looking forward to future chapters.

Waiting is such torture. So very well done. Even better than the first chapter. Keep it coming, please!

Yeah... you gotta finish this one, Joe. I'm skipping past all the sex to get to the plot. That's rare on this site. Good work, as always... glad to have you back writing!

It's a good story, you just need to go back and reread everything. There's a major difference between cue and queue, and seeing them mixed up disrupts the flow of the story. Same for grammar mistakes.

Similar 2 Marshalien's stitch in time. But ur story does not have dat same whiny quality 2 it. Pls keep it coming

This is some of the best stuff I've ever read! Only thing I'd add is an editor for the minor typographic things.

Five stars, 'nuff said.

Now maybe John and Rodger can get together and Plan for their Future.

and since Tara is around and Mrs.C he Does'nt have to depend on Tiffany.

Definitely went downhill. Like watching a train wreck.

Holy crap, how are you mixing hot sex with genuinely interesting character dev?

Oh who cares, this is wonderful. Another 5 stars, and I may have to log in on my lappy and vote again :D

He's supposed to be a 30 or 40 year old with all those memories, maturity and wit an 18 year olds body, then gets drunk and f**** around with Tiffany total b******* don't know if I want to read anymore this stupid s***.

I cant remember if i commented this before somewhere but i love this story and i come back to it every now and then. I have a request if youre still writing. Id love a rework of this story taking it in a less magical direction. It seems like the core idea is being thrown back in time, but it turns into greek myth fuckery. Id rather see this character live in his normal life as a formerly old man. Theres so much to do with that. Cheers.

As well written as any do-over I've read. Thanks for the entertainment and Happy Holidays to you and yours.

Nice do over story. I would be making investments ASAP.

It was a pretty good story until he decided to lose 99% of his brain and give a chance to a faithless cheating bitch. She wasn't "different". She was the same person capable of cheating. What a load of BS. 1 star.

I'm extremely disappointed with the mc in this chapter

Chapter 1:"You were supposed to meet me at my locker," Tiffany pouted. She was as stunning as I remembered with her BLOD HAIR and green eyes.

Chapter 2:I looked at Tiffany and couldn't help but smile. She really was beautiful. She had long DARK HAIR and was athletically built as you might expect from her being a cheerleader.

MC is just another horny teenager in this chapter how disappointing.

Not thrilled at what going on in his love life.