All Comments on 'Horny Little Women'

good clean sex and fun.

Brilliant and very erotic,more of the same again

Keep adding to the story. This could be a great story

Very good writing! I can't wait to see what happens next!

fuckin Awwsome loved it keep it going and hury

Great story. looking foward to more

very nice story with a lot of potential , please do continue I can hardly wait to read more

I think this is your best one yet Mark. Hope if what you told me is true you do one for each sister and Mom as well. Maybe some cousin thrown in for good measure?

Hugs and Slurps from you know who!

a good start and laying the foundation for the rest of the story. he may never make it back home.

More of the same please

Enjoyed it. but it needs editing. For example: clothes can't be respectful, maybe respectable.

This looks like my kind of story!

its bloom'ng gr8. how much? u judge..all i know is i didnt use my fingers to type this comment.

like makes me wunder, what the sister's will geet

it's a lick out :P

I felt that the story was rushed. Good storyline, however you should have drawn it out with alot of teasing. Incest stories should have a gentle paced build-up with lotsa teasing. It's all about the anticipation. A good read nevertheless.

This was seriously some amazing writing. You should take Louisa May Alcotts Little Woman and turn it into a porn story. Like all the old fashioned clothes and stuff were amazing in the book so they would be even better pornized lol!

excellent writing- can't wait to read more

Hi id just like to say that was an amazing story the details where great but not too much and the story was original for the most part. You have a real gift for writing.

I like this story. So far, so good. I can't wait to read the next one.

...a ripping good mystery in any worth wile piece of fiction. It certainly helps that there are also a whole plethora of interesting (sexy) characters...

I have a need to read more after this excellent first chapter

The story starts well. I'm looking forwards to read the others.

Mother/son and brother/sister, the very best types of incest.

brilliant you style of writing is great. just don't rush into sex. tease us a bit cheers

Where the FUCK did you learn how to pace a story's plot?!? This is one of the worst paced, poorly timed, jumbled-together set of scenes out of all the stories i've read here! I was willing to grit my teeth and bear the pompous, self-satisfied, victorian writing style, as long as the story followed an interesting path. But JESUS, man... The path isnt as much convoluted as it is TOTALLY SCHIZOPHRENIC. All that intro and backstory, and then poof- hes fucking mom. Worst pacing ever. What a total waste of character space. This had promise. Go back and re-think your plot line and character interaction developement, and subtext devices.

Q

Not all far-Eastern women are Chinese, and no maids in the Philippines are Chinese either; the Chinese are the burgeoning middle-class in the Philippines, they have the money, and most of the businesses and banks, and they don't do manual or domestic work, they hire filipino's for that; if you'd ever been there you might have picked-up on that. Filipino women have SPANISH names, 400 years of Spanish occupation and influence will do that.

Today I found yours stories. Very good ones. Congratulations. I'll read all of them.

You wrote: "a light spray from her cunt that hung momentarily in the air like a sprinkle of perfume."

Awesome

.Thank you so much, David

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and we'll written.

You know what...... well

.. I ran into loss of password, and literotica did not assist me

We'll being positive I totally dig this "chapter," who wouldn't?

~ my literotica ID is cudsnuggleat

I am David

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He's over a mile away and his sister finds him hiding ?? You act like he comes from the sticks and is not used to wearing nice clothing, Manila is a great city where he would be exposed to culture and fine art. Not a well thought out plot.