All Comments on 'House of Pain Ch. 02'

But I'm very much liking John. It seems a bit much for a first time, but then that's the point. Liked how he checked and reassured her, but didn't fake the action. Only thing that would have improved it would be some aftercare. She needs to process, but alone after an intense public first time? Recipe for a big crash.

Your style is deceptively simple. We are indeed the fly on the wall here. You bring the entire scene (in the broader, theatrical sense of the word) to life. Will be watching for the next chappie.

But a nicely written grounding for a series..

Where does he take her to next ?

Hopefully w shall find out

Thanks for the comments, MasterfulJim, and FA-JF. I totally agree about the need for aftercare. There's some aftercare at the start of Chapter 3 (which has been submitted already, and I will wait impatiently for it to go up.) But also, John's in the business of selling sex toys - he's got 20 potential customers in the store. Basically, my thought is that that's going to come first. (Which is a bit of a sneak peak into the next chapter, because - John doesn't become Sara's Dom - that's someone else.)

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After care is important. As soon as we finish playing , I kick Mrs J out of bed and tell her to put the kettle on....

I'm always in need of a cuppa by then:-)

As soon as I stop laughing, I'm gonna start throwing things through the screen at you.... ;)

Had plenty of practice dodging airborne objects over the years ...

Think it's something I said. :-)

How's Mrs. Jim's aim?

Unfortunately improved as the years of practice have rolled by....

She now gets within 6 feet of me with a low flying plate, though next doors cat got a helluva fright the other day when she tried to throw and drink her gin at the same time......

Bless..

Roll on H o P 3

Ah, House of Pain Chapter 3. I've submitted both Chapter 3 and 4, and now wait, impatiently, for the stories to go up.

Sploosh.

This is the story I've been looking for, panting for these past 10 years. Oh my fucking god!

I have thoroughly enjoyed reading all the chapters of this story. The characters are believable and the story is very erotic but also well paced and developed. Perhaps one day other characters may visit the house of pain!

Very very erotic.