All Comments on 'How's That Working Out For You?'

Its not bad story at all but it is without any real passion or emtion at all.

The main character in this story did the best thing possible. He developed and implemented a plan of action the allowed him to lose the wife, hurt the cheater and then moved on. He has a prettier, smarter, and more loyal wife and when he had a chance to twist the knife he did so. The best revenge.

I enjoyed reading this fast paced story, and thought it was well written. I think the story was written as if an officer in the Armed Forces were telling the story. Thanks for the good story.....Rich

"Gretchen WAS and always will be worth fighting for". Surely not in the past tense?

Not as flamboyant as some stories. But the husband did what he had to do. I am not sure why the ex-wife thought the husband was a wimp. I don't think they would have stayed as a couple even if the husband could forgive her transgressions. They were too different from each other. Well written story, keep them coming.

and rewriting reality so the past fits into the fantasy of how we would have liked to re-act, compared to how we probably did. His cold fish reaction to utter rejection and humiliation whilst being deeply in love flies in the face of human nature, but his long brooding desire to hurt back doesn't. I think it would have been more manly to admit your devastation, and emotional intensity makes for a good tale. Still, I enjoyed it. Thanks...Mancelt.

Perhaps it would be better if you used more short dialogues to develop the story. Here you have a long narrative followed by a discourse by the cheater justifying herself (?!?) more or less.... This would be more emotional if you did it in short snippets of dialogue...

THEY STOOD ON THE SIDEWALK AND HAD THIS DISCUSSION NICE FAIRYTALE.

Until you get to the lecture at the end. It really was not needed.

<p>In the story Julie's character didn't know really why they divorced. She just thought her first husband knew she cheated and that was it. And Julie didn't understand why and why the main character seemed to be fighting harder for his second wife than for her. And that needed to answered and explained. And sometimes <i>explaining</i> the "why" to something is seen as a lecture by someone not wanting to hear it.</p>

<p>And it needed to be done to bring an end to the story. Otherwise it doesn't make sense if <i>she</i> doesn't also understand as well. Just having the reader understand is only one part of the story (^_^).</p>

<p>The only thing I was lost on was different terms. My Dad was a Marine and I was still lost on a lot of the terms used and had to look them up.</p>

<p> But other than that I liked the story (^_^)</p>

-Risq

Well written and decent treatment of the subject matter, however, the lecture at the end was not needed. The story said it already, and the beatdown was enough. Perhaps a few minutes at the end with his new wife would have been a nicer touch.

M

I am a big consequences fan, but am not a part of the torch the bitch club (nor the forgiveness at any costs, for that matter). This story handled it so well. Having worked in family law, I've rarely heard of the cheating spouse sobbing their heart out at being caught, then pining away as so many stories here have it. Thinking about it, I never have! Most cheaters react in a manner similar to this story. But, then the natural consequences take effect. The cheater is cheated upon. Life isn't what they thought it would be. My favorite was a wife who left her middle aged husband who wasn't in good shape and who wasn't exciting. She married a ranger who was buff and they traveled to exotic places. He left the service and shortly became a 350 pound couch potato! In the meantime, the rejected husband began working out (he would have earlier if she had complained). He married a beautiful woman whose job took them around the world! It took 5 years but you couldn't have planned a better revenge! In my humble opinion, you should have given the loyalty bit only. "The lecture" took away from the best line in your story that she was not worth fighting for! Thanks! - Ttom

It was a formula story and not told in a way to spark any real emotion.

It took a while for the point to be made but it was well done.

It gives me nostalgia for the days when the Army actually spent some time at Ft. Riley and Ft. Bragg, instead of only Iraq and Afghanistan.

An excellent story, very well written and detailed. And all the characters got what they deserved in the end. A great job of writing.

Somehow I feel like you slipped in a moral to the story and that is first for what I have read from this site. And even moreso it was an enjoyable short story. I hope the rest of your work is this enjoyable. anon jerry

I think authors who are stuck on one type story are not writers at all, just another guy who for whatever reason is venting a whole lot of anger. I'm not suggesting you don't have valid reasons for whatever rage you are trying to work through, just that if you must do it, the least you could do is use some imagination. I won't say I didn't enjoy your stories. Actually enjoy is probably not the right word. Lets just say they held my interest. Oh, btw, I read all of them. Here's the thing and my only real criticism...they're all the same with just some minor variations. You practically rewrote the same story with different names for the characters every time. That tells me you aren't interested in telling stories, rather engaging in a personal diatribe at some un named former spouse. I will say I hope your self imposed therapy did you some good. I suspect you needed it. I included my email in the subject box because I am not a registered member of Literotica and have no desire to be one. I do however as a matter of principle refuse to comment in any way without identifying myself. Not that I expect or necessarily want a response.

I am not sure if you are in the Army or did a hell of a lot of research. You got all the Army facts right, that alone in my book made it great. I also like the way you right, it makes me feel like I was the one telling the story. Great work, keep the stories coming..

and I can't help but ask all who were taken in: "How's that Hope and Change Shit working out for you?"

So much for all of that; I did enjoy your story and thought it was well worth the Five Stars I gave it

considering that Bush put us in a war, fuck up the budget, and had been doing so for eight years. Lets see, hummmm, were alot better of than we should be. Also the story was great.

I would have rated it at least 4 stars and probably 5 stars except the author lied. The author promised the story would not include a lot of revenge but it did. First, the author had to get the Sgt busted down to a Pvt and then he had to have Brice beat Larry up. Next the author had to insult and pile on the insults and hurt to Julie.

The divorce and what happened earlier and showing that Julie was sorry and realized she make a huge mistake was fine. And, it would have been in line with what the author promised. However, the vicious ending was not necessary and was very brutal and contray to the author's promise.

You R misinformed. The country became this way under Bush's watch. Ask him ho many time he raised the debt ceiling. So consider the fact until u know the facts. Email me and we can have a cilvilize conversation

Reminder Old Wayne this is not a politcal site

Go to Your "liberal" fox website and comment on politics. That well be a more appropriate forum to post a political comment

Straightforward story, without much of the emotional verbiage that sometimes mucks up a story. The so-called extreme revenge that one commentator claimed as a excuse to rate the story low, is actually rather mild.

I enjoyed the story and the writing quality and overall found the story to be entertaining.

I don't find the military stories very interesting; they exist in their own little world and outside the battlefield there is very little actual honor

UndrApprctd why don't you show us what honor is, hummm I guess sitting somewhere on your ass jacking off while my brotheren are somewhere fighting so you can jack off. Maybe if you shoved your dick in your mouth in stead off sticking it in your ass the world would be a better place. Honor that.

What I said was, that HONOR exists in their world but not in real life...buy a dictionary.

So give props where they are due: much better than the closet cucks skulking this board. Being a nitwit is okay on the internet, they don't even realize they are anonymous, fuckin hilarious.

Never cheat on your spouse.

Julie cheated with Jacobs and he convinced her that her husband was a wimp.

He wasn't.

She fucked up, he traded up and everyone is happy in the end.

Except the douche bag sgt. and the cheating slut wife Julie.

HA Fuck 'um

so many cocks smoked while getting cornholed, betrayed!

Very good Romantic Revenge Story. Sometime the greener neighbor's grass is green from the green paint. 5 stars!

Matt Moreau has a similar Romantic Revenge Story "Madifan and Jessica Carlysle".

In this and that stories the exwives told their exhusband they WERE THE BEST!!!!!!

In both stories the exhusbands found the happiness in their second marriages.

Even though there are similarities between this work and Matt Moreau's, the main characters are worlds apart.

Anothermarrieddude's hero explained in no uncertain terms that his ex was not worth fighting for because once he knew what she was really like, she was not worth ANYTHING to him, end of story.

He knew, without any ambiguity, that she really did not hold his love for her in any importance. She disrespected him and betrayed him, so even though it may not have been about money, she was just a gold-digging whore.

Once he saw her for what she was, it was all over bar the shouting, and at the closing of the story, he walked away to leave her to whatever fate has in store for her.

Matt Moreau's wimp still carried the torch to the end for the slut who betrayed him, and it took further proof of her infidelity to even bring the relationship to closure.

Even at the end of the story, it was obvious she still had hooks in him, though the story was written that he had moved on.

Well, I don't actually believe that he had moved on. There is no justification for keeping the ex in his life.

Anothermarrieddude, my apologies for focusing on the other story, but I could not in all conscience, leave a comparison between this and one of Matt Moreau's stories go unchallenged.

And DWornock, why don't you move in with Matt Moreau? You'd make such a lovely couple. Is your name D. Wornock? If it is, you and Matt can marry. It's ok, I know he'll be fine in accepting that he take YOUR last name instead of you taking his... Matt Wornock? Yeah that works.

And you have ABSOLUTELY no fear that he will ever answer any betrayal you might commit with anything but care and compassion. He'll clean up after you, and will never, ever insult you, or punish the bastard (or bitch) with whom you have broken any promises you may have made to him in the heat of your undying love. There's no need for 'violence' and 'revenge', if you intend to keep him around like a puppy anyway. He shouldn't be so insecure, that your actions would hurt him, should he?

Great story and a very realistic outcome for the protagonist. I have seen this scenario in life. Those people that do not let a loser spouse take them down often fair very well in their next relationship. The painful lesson they have learned serves them well when picking the next partner. Experience truly is the best teacher.

In 1961 I was stationed at Kleber Kaserne, Kaisweslautern, Germany. Due to my personal function, I did not do any daily conduct with the regular troops and , as a result, I frequently found myself (with a hard to get pass) downtown and carousing the local disco's and coffee shops.

One night, I met a beautiful, gorgeous and mischevious green eyed blonde (American Wife), we chatted, we danced and it was obvious we were going to get a room locally (The Hotel Metropol - for those of you who were there) and our conversation led to where her husband was?

Well, turns out, he was a tank commander, one hell of a good soldier, carried himself well and was highly respected by everyone - a really likeable guy and _ I knew him well and held him in high regard as a soldier and a man!

First, I had second thoughts bothering me all evening because she was married to a soldier and was really trying to talk myself out of sleeping with her (you had to see her - you couldn't stand up, she was soooo....everything) and when I discovered who she was, I took the cheap way out, went to the WC and sneaked out. I always and to this day, feel bad for him and often wonder what became of them.

For what it is worth, I did hear a few months later that a soldier came back from the field early, went home, found his wife in bed with a GI and promptly put a 45 .cal between his eyes. I never heard more, just wondered.

Anyway, enjoyed your story, brought back some memories, some good and don't know how he kept himself together.

BTW, I married the daughter of an AF General and divorced her 15 years later, she was a very hoy nymph and liked variety. She let her conduct get out of hand, it affected my job (a civilian now in the Corporate world), I divorced her and started over in another city.

Thanks for the read. Time for you to write some more, you did okay with this one!

You prooved you can do much better!

3*

been there done that got the damn scares from it and the T shirt with the little ribbens

like i said good story it happen to allot of guys!

oh btw i'm ralph_s48@yahoo.com

and yes i'm old

but the taste will always remain, TK U MLJ LV NV

Nice.

Nuff said OB

I am once again impressed with you as an author. Your writing style is commendable. It sounds like you were in the military or are close with someone in the military, because you got the personality of the people involved in the story right. I don't think you mentioned if the protagonist was a First or Second Lieutenant, or if he were any of the higher ones (Lieutenant Colonel or Lieutenant General). It does have some bearing on the story, because it would show just how arrogant SGT Jacobs is. I doubt any enlisted would be stupid enough to bed a wife of the latter two, but you never know. All in all, the attitude of the story was definitely military. Great Job

... poor execution. Get an editor who knows the difference between imply and infer. One who can re-work poorly worded paragraphs, and knows how to present abbreviations in military jargon... your explanations are clumsy, and overly wordy.

I find it really unlikely that two individuals in their situation would have been so verbose in their conversation...

She and he both just seemed to run on and on... it was like listening to two logical individuals having a logical talk on something...

She would have been unlikely to be logical - she could have been upset with what she now realized she gave up, or embarrassed at what she now has, or angry that he would effectively make what she had be even worse (leaving a wimp and her life being "eh" after beats her life being "eh" after leaving a guy and finding out she CHOSE the wimp), and no matter what she'd be unlikely to intentionally agree with his assessment of how she behaved...

As for him, I can see saying Most of the things he did (rubbing her nose in her choice, pointing out how he just couldn't care less how she felt or what she wanted and especially letting her know he's happy that she isn't... I just don't see him spending so much time or wasting so many words to just say "Hope you have a miserable life, Bitch."

Previous anon - retarded, can't understand two syllable words, school didn't help.

5*

I like this one

A galaxy of stars

And very good -

He got out of it all he wanted and realized quickly how little she was worth - so he won forward and backward - takes a bit of strength to wait it out and not act on impulsw but he did good heh.

Nice work thanks

After 20 plus years active service I saw quite a few cases of this type including with my first wife. In my case the L T did a little time and left the Army. My second wife and I have been together now for 34years this Feb. She and I really like this story.

Thanks or the entertainment and memories.

I married my childhood sweetheart and although we'd been together much of our time growing up, she did have time to lose her cherry and hump a larger cock for a while, without me knowing. Then we were married and she admitted she'd had sex before our wedding night but made it out to be a failed mission.

About 3 years after we were wed, Elle started acting a bit funny and then she came to me, telling me she wanted a divorce. The guy, Tom, who popped her cherry was back and she'd started sleeping with him again. Of course, I was devastated, we'd agreed she'd go off the pill and were about to start a family. But the way I looked at it, the whole thing was a no-brainer, why would I fight for a liar and cheater? I certainly didn't want to stay married to an admitted cheater who'd been able to hide it from me, simply because I was gone working all day.

So we divorced, splitting the little we had, she kept the rental and the little bit of furniture we'd purchased and I'd keep the little bit we had in our checking account. We only had one car and it was what I used to get to work in. Tom had a car so she didn't feel she needed it. I moved to a neighboring town, much larger than what we'd grown up in and lucked into a business that was just starting up. There was little money for the first year and it took all of my/our time to build. With a share in the business it made me work even harder.

But the day came when we were actually in the black and getting a real paycheck and it snowballed from there (IT). We hired a small team to help and one of them showed a lot of interest in me. Sonya was young but incredibly smart and painfully shy. I finally asked her out, not so much as a date but for a job well done. We were married within 9 months and we were happier than I could have ever imagined. She was everything Elle wasn't. Kind, compassionate, creative, hard working, passionate in bed, she was a virgin on our wedding night. A REAL virgin with terrible pain, blood everywhere and so tight I could hardly push in.

Seven years later we had two children, five year old and a three year old, when Sonya suggested we go for a ride and show the kids where I grew up, Sonya had never seen my childhood house either. The home Sonya and I lived in was paid for, very nice but modest. It was a 4 bedroom ranch style on 15 acres with a pond and lake frontage at the end of a road.

We ended up driving all over my home town and Sonya was thrilled to see where I came from. We spent time in the same park I grew up across from and the people who owned it were nice enough to let us come in and I was able to show her my bedroom growing up and where I frantically masturbated to adolescent fantasies. It was great fun and she dropped me off at the only grocery store while she took the kids for ice cream a block over and would stop by to pick me up. I went in and bought the apples I was craving and didn't pay attention when I went to pay for it. The cashier was Elle! She was as surprised as I was but was professional and after I paid, she stopped me to ask if I had a minute and she took her lunch break.

We went out to a sitting area and I just sat and looked at her. I have to admit, she rarely entered my thoughts, the minute Sonya stepped into my life. She was quiet for a minute and when she looked up at me, I was surprised by the tears. She was choked up and couldn't talk for a bit. The first word out of her mouth was 'Sorry'. She went on to tell me our divorce was the second worse thing that happened to her, the first was cheating on me. Elle told me Tom had stayed with her for a few months after our divorce was final and when she came home unexpectedly one afternoon, he was screwing their neighbor in their bed. I have to admit, I didn't feel sorry for her but was able to keep it bottled inside.

She went on to tell me she still lived in our old rental and after her divorce from Tom, she'd taken the cashiers job, where she still worked. Tearfully she went on to explain she'd never been with another man since Tom and asked if there was a chance I'd be interested in reconciling, she'd never stopped loving me through our divorce and during her time with Tom. It wasn't until Tom left her to move in with the woman he'd cheated on her with, that she realized how much she loved me. All could think of, was gag me with a spoon.

I didn't have a chance to answer her because my two boys came running up from behind me and one jumped on my lap and the other held my arm with ice cream everywhere! They were tell me "dad, you should have seen all the ice cream!" About that time, Sonya walked up and gave me kiss and handed me my own ice cream cone AFTER she licked it a few times! She looked from me to Elle and back, wondering who I was talking to and I just introduced her Elle, Sonya knew instantly who she was. The boys were all over me, talking over each other and laughing while they made messes with their ice cream cone. Elle got up and said how much she enjoyed seeing me again and when she turned back to the store, I could see she was building up to a good cry, but you know what? Where it would have at one time killed me to see her tears, this time it meant nothing to me.

I guess the story ends there but there was one other thing. I started noticing an old car that parked on the road not far from my house. It was there once or twice per week during the summer. I started to worry but before I called the police, I decided I'd sneak up and see if I could figure out who it was or should it be a burglar. Sneaking around through the trees and brush, I came up behind it where they could see me with a mirror and finally stepped up to the door and looked inside. It was Elle, crying as she looked down the hill toward my home and the lake. She was badly startled when I thumped the window and the instant she saw me, she started her car and tore out of there as if I were going to beat her.

I never saw her again but did receive a letter a few days later. She again apologized for everything she'd done to us and asked for my forgiveness. In her desire for something she didn't understand what she was looking for, she'd destroyed only her own life and after seeing my wife and boys, realized it was only her that lost. She mentioned she deserved everything she got. I showed the letter to Sonya and she cried. Afterward, she told me she'd never hurt me like Elle had and wanted to make sure I trusted her, which I did implicitly. I think that afternoon is when we created our little girl that came some nine months later...

little to the plot. Again, as is common with your tales, the plot is secondary to you getting across your points about adultery. The dialogue was too formal for the circumstances. She asked if he would be willing to take her back if she left muscle boy. In his response he never mentioned that he had a wife he loved. Instead he delineates multiple reasons why that would not be a good decision. Really?

the wife has an affair and cuts him off from sex almost immediately after getting married. You should have given some kind of clue that the wife was a bitch that didn't really love him. It just seemed too implausible. And she lost respect for him because he allowed her to decorate the house?

Hey beamer......you have a lotta balls telling anothermarrieddude how his story basically sucked. So I checked out your contributions to literotica and what i got was a piece of shit poem. THATS ALL!!!!!! Man, you should sweep around your own back door before you sweep around someone elses. And besides, most of the good writers that I read are somewhat humble, at the least, instead of trying to bolster their own egos. For this, I say a hearty FUCK YOU!!!

You too? You seemed to know the ins and outs of army life. Yep, there's definitely some cheating going on pretty much anywhere there's troops. Enjoyed the story and the memories.

Someone who commented seemed to be a bit confused about the L.T. and LTC differences. If the story had been read carefully the commenter would have realized that a recent graduate of OCS would be a 2nd Lieutenant. As a platoon leader he could well have been a 1st Lt., but it's extremely unlikely he'd have been of a higher rank given the time-frame of the story.

The unit(s) I was in had one of the highest divorce rates (other than MPs) in the Army. It just seemed to be endemic because of the kind of people we had to have to do the jobs we did.

The situation given in this story was actually quite real. The Lt. handled it very well indeed, involving his chain of command appropriately and avoiding a physical confrontation with a lower ranked individual. I'd have been proud to have had him in any of my units.

I was medically retired over 30 years ago and still occasionally find myself chuckling in wonder at some of the bizarre behaviors I saw while I served. This is usually triggered by something my present spouse says that demonstrates how little she understands about the military mindset because she wasn't an integral part of it. She just has to listen to weird stories when we old soldiers get together and reminisce (tell lies) about our various service careers. It's amazing to hear some of the conclusions she draws after listening to us for a while.

Thanks for writing this story, and writing it (apparently) as if you were a soldier.

Stupid cheating cunt. Making assumptions, especially when proved wrong is an idiotic thing to do. She deserves a rotten life while our hero is getting what he deserves, happiness.

Just awful at end.

I’ve never seen so much BS from a know it all with no idea what they are trying to say. If you had any military service you know that having an affair is often deadly. Accidentally hunting shootings, accidental shoots during train, or plain and simple fragging. So him kicking Jacobs ass was being nice. Much worse has happened for real, this is only a story. A big switch in story telling by the author.

Back ground and under story well planned.

Character development was strong, 5 stars.

You do some really good work. Wish you were still writing. This was another straight forward story of a wife who makes a bad choice. Always good to see betrayed spouse come out on top.

I love this story. A good BTB where the cheating wife gets a chance to see very clearly what she lost. Doesn't hurt that he gets to tune up an asshole while he was about it.

Good story enjoyed

As first time his speech too long

Cut by at least third

Everything else good and lot great

Nobody gets over a cheater that fast, but deceit certainly kills love very, very fast. The anger and hurt persists a very long time.

What the hell is with this kind of nonsense –

“You have no doubt already guessed this was going to happen by virtue of the fact that you're reading a story found in the loving wives section, but I was very surprised at the time.”

Breaking readers’ link & flow & pulling them out of story suddenly like that & you call yourself storyteller

Loved it...5 Stars ... Easily could've added a 2nd chapter...

5ive 5tars!!!!!

3 stars - About the only subject you seemed to have some knowledge was the grunt training. You need a lot more practice with loving relationships.

Decent story. My one critique is in regards to the confrontation between Jacobs/Larry and Brice. Jacobs was in the Army, so, supposedly, he would know how to handle himself. The fact that he is a bouncer further reinforces that idea. While I have no issue with Brice besting Jacobs, I would expect Jacobs would put up a better fight.

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Pasqual

What a stupid little girl!

It would also have been good to find out he was now a Major.

I don't know. There was too much information on camp and army stuff which I found quite distracting and of no value to the story. If you had removed that, you would have had a decent candidate for the 750 words challenge. Like this, it's merely another dull read.

The ending could have been a whole lot stronger. Also a physical confrontation, although it dispels the wimp angle, seemed out of place in this story. Finally I wonder why you portray your M/C as 5 ft 6 in in all of your writing and state, imply or infer the husband tp be small overall.

It was a decent story, but with a lot of Army training that just added fluff or filler to it. You knew that eventually Julie was going to cheat, as it telegraphed it well. And once SGT Jacobs was mentioned (not being in the field), you knew it was with him.

Authors best work.

A decent enough story but the thing I can never wrap my head around is the "She did things with her lover that she wouldn't do with her husband" angle. Why would anyone even care about all that? If a wife cheats then the mechanics of her affair are of no importance, the only thing that matters to me is that she cheated.

Loved it!!