by WritersUnblock
Ok, i have to say something to the other comments. BAD THINGS HAPPEN!! I mean come on it's a zombie infestation people! We all hope for a good ending but that doesn't allways happen, much as we wish differently. Atleast Anny got away with their child. And yes, I'm in tears right now.
Overall you wrote a great story. I love The Walking Dead and this was a lot like that universe, but a bit brighter in tone. With that said, this chapter felt a bit rushed, almost like you got tired of writing this story. IMO, heroic fatalism should be more spontaneous and surprise the reader. It's best used when everything is going good, but then the shit hits and someone makes the sacrifice. In this one I knew someone was going to die the moment they went searching for supplies. Tom and Merry's death was wonderfully done, and I feel this could have been done as good as that.
I was a little sad to see John die. But that is the way things go. You wrote an excellent story and should be proud of yourself. The last chapter was rushed a little but still it was nice. thank you
this story was incredible. I felt the emotion john did throughout this story. expertly done. masterful finish.
I FUCKING HATE YOU.. End it when it gets good you so could have made him pull out that john charm and finish off those zombies and still live.. Why did you have to kill him!!!???!!?
I wished they never decided to split up. I wish they used more of their melee weapons. I wish they all would have made it to the island. Sigh....5 stars overall.