All Comments on 'Hunger For Love'

I am blown away by this story!! It is amazingly!! Please continue with it!!!!

Good story but need some serious editing. What happened to Morphin? I'm guessing he is not a ghost like Willow?

But:............what happen to morph and willow plz Wright an epilogue I need more......

Looks like you had a great story idea, but unfortunately, I couldn't stand to read all the grammar and syntax errors. I had to stop reading about 1/4 of the way down the first page.

One serious issue is verb tense. Your verb tenses are flipping all over the place. This is one of the most difficult problems to expect your readers to just ignore because it is a constant onslaught.

Every piece of writing needs editing and correcting. I just send a story to an editor. Even great writers need editors. Everyone who posts stories here should definitely use an editor.

This story had made me cry and although the grammars are awful it still didn't stop me from finishing the whole story. I don't really know how to describe it but the story line is incredible and you can say that I'm still craving for more from it. I loved all the twists and turns of the story and my heart almost broke into two when I thought that Willow died. It all just felt surreal. Amazing work :) Keep on doing this kind of stories and surely your name will be known.

Did you really think that your readers could appreciate and understand your work in this format ? Really ? Its almost illiterate ! Such a shame ,since the actual content is reasonably good but it's simply impossible to read in in this form.Get an editor and try again.

Having now struggled through each page I can now see that English is not your first language.It's a shame, because this really is a great story..... actually.I would offer to edit myself but sadly I'm just too busy right now but if no one else has offered in the next week or so I will happily offer again.

Even with not perfect english, you managed to pull it off. I really enjoyed your story!