All Comments on 'Husband to Master Ch. 01'

OH DEAR LORD I WISH I COULD FIND A MAN LIKE THAT !

This, your first story, was an absolute winner! I enjoyed every word of it, MissBored88; I can only suggest, if you continue to be bored - which I find hard to believe! - you write more scintillating stories like this one!

5 stars and thank you for sharing this wonderful talent with us.

Hi MissBored, just wanted give you a wave and say how much I enjoyed editing your story. :) Juicy.

My biggest issue throughout the story was the constant change between past and present tence. "Joe was sitting" to the next line being "Joe is in his office". It will be much easier to read if you pick one and stick to it.

with the comment about changing tenses, but still... a deliciously hot first story. Five stars.

Your story gave me a massive hard on,

Nice one xxxxx

Great jerk off material! A fun read!

One question, though. What would have happened if she hadn't been submissive and after he slapped her and she still didn't submit and he becoming even more violent and after the rape beeing freed her calling the police?

thanks for all your comments, gave me things to think about and work on,this was my first attmept, but will start chapter 02 soon, hope you all enjoyed it, also if she had have resisted submission and joe had have forced it then that would be an entirely different story and he would not have freed her, but good point all the same......thanks again :)

great story and the writing of it . but i think you might get more out of it with this added to spice it this next part up . as i send you the plan lol.

cant wait for the continuing adventures of Joe and His whore

..is currently being looked at by an editor, the fantastic juicy starchild. so hopefully will be with you all shortly xx