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Anonymousabout 10 years agoWith English as a second language, I'd suggest an editor.
Your storyline follows others I've read but your weak understanding of grammar and syntax makes the story stilted and difficult to follow. If you plan to continuing this story or develop others I encourage you to seek help from an good editor.
Anonymousabout 10 years agoOne character's name defines the whole story!
KSHITZ.
It's da SHITS alright!
Cindy1001almost 9 years agoCould very much be improved
The theme is good but the story could use some serious editing. Past and present tenses are intermingled. Choiceof words is often simple.
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